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(((Kevin)))  You have no idea how your works speak right to the very heart of me. You always know when there is something going on with me and just what I need to hear at the time and send me a link to something you have written. I know this has nothing to do with me but I SOOOOOOO relate! The depth of raw emotion and passion in this piece leave me hanging onto every word. I can honestly say that I was holding my breath while reading and at the end it all escaped in in a huge sigh. You have a talent that is unmatched by others and I am amazed by you all the time! I sometimes go back through older stuff of yours just to see what things were like back then and the changes are wonderous! You have grown by leaps and bounds! Now, since you have given me a desire to write, I have a gift for you... "A Hug" Two arms flung open ever so wide Two eyes that see don't try to hide Two ears that listen and not just hear Two hearts that beat the purpose so clear Two paths that cross yes, yours and mine Two friends forever I like that just fine Two lives to live ever so far apart Two souls somehow met and our friendship did start Two smiles so bright and quick to show Two voices give meaning to thoughts that grow Two arms again thrown ever so wide A hug from a friend That never will hide Thank you (((Kevin))) for being a wonderful friend and drawing me out without even trying. You are amazing!! NOW GO WRITE THE BOOK DAMNIT!!!!!  yes!!! write it |
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presence
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fall in to to the i
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((( Kev ))))) I so hope that your working on that book,, Your brilliant,,, your talent to pull thoughts, feelings, and deep emotions from within you,, well it just Aweeeeeeeeee's me,,,, You are a gift,,,,  thank you...as a gift though i do come with a return slip...  yes but will they give cash or do we have to accept store credit???  |
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K, you always take my emotions and lay them out where everyone can see. Darn it! Wonderful write... i can bring a dust pan and or a mop if you wish... you know what? i have come to the conclusion that emotions serve no purpose unless we use them so, i think i will bring the mop...that way we can at least recycle the water... thank you for your kind words... |
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7 Toys
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thanks kev
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"End of Endless"
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oh yes, yes ... vivid and richly textured ... cerulean blue ... the colour of wide open sky  (and I didn't even need a dictionary  ) show off.... 
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i like this only now i have to get out my dictionary
thanks a lot
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Warm Salt
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I'm not sure if this is one of those that is for real or just your creativity soaring? Great job buddy, nonetheless every time i think i know it seems i am wrong so i end up asking too |
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On a Bench, In The City
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had to visit again i think you should do more like this...maybe spoken word? |
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since you asked... i have two questions for you 1) why did you choose to format this as a paragraph? 2) why do you feel the need to ask for validation instead of just putting a title and also in your responses you don't respond, you ask more questions...what is the point of this? i know that is more than 2 questions but, hey you asked. please do not take this as anything more than my curiosity i am a total novice and would never purposefully demean anyone who has the guts to put themselves out there like this... well the paragraph thing is the style i just kinda happened apon and it has been fun so far and i like to know what people think and why the think it. im not gonna tell anyone what it means to me that takes away from the beauty of the poem itself. id rather have people make their own meanings. and the questions help me figure out what the think it means. i am not sure it does take anything away from the work. sometimes it is nice to know what the author is thinking in the write...but, that is what makes poems different then say, a book. in poetry every piece can mean something different to every reader. a lot depends on where we are in our life. i think that this piece would be better served if it were written in a more traditional style. line breaks can be very effective at getting the emotion across...just an opinion... and btw...i think you do have the makings of a good write here. i just dont think it hit its stride as is... well thank you for your imput thanks for the discussion and having an open enough mind to do so... |
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since you asked... i have two questions for you 1) why did you choose to format this as a paragraph? 2) why do you feel the need to ask for validation instead of just putting a title and also in your responses you don't respond, you ask more questions...what is the point of this? i know that is more than 2 questions but, hey you asked. please do not take this as anything more than my curiosity i am a total novice and would never purposefully demean anyone who has the guts to put themselves out there like this... well the paragraph thing is the style i just kinda happened apon and it has been fun so far and i like to know what people think and why the think it. im not gonna tell anyone what it means to me that takes away from the beauty of the poem itself. id rather have people make their own meanings. and the questions help me figure out what the think it means. i am not sure it does take anything away from the work. sometimes it is nice to know what the author is thinking in the write...but, that is what makes poems different then say, a book. in poetry every piece can mean something different to every reader. a lot depends on where we are in our life. i think that this piece would be better served if it were written in a more traditional style. line breaks can be very effective at getting the emotion across...just an opinion... and btw...i think you do have the makings of a good write here. i just dont think it hit its stride as is... |
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since you asked...
i have two questions for you 1) why did you choose to format this as a paragraph? 2) why do you feel the need to ask for validation instead of just putting a title and also in your responses you don't respond, you ask more questions...what is the point of this? i know that is more than 2 questions but, hey you asked. please do not take this as anything more than my curiosity i am a total novice and would never purposefully demean anyone who has the guts to put themselves out there like this... |
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Warm Salt
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very emotional piece
"She needed you there…and tonight, she asked if she could- go sleep with mommy....... “under the ground”..." gut-wrenching...really... |
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^^^^^ pain killer omg too funny
 ^^^^^ ok 3 parts down where does it end? |
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still waiting....
not sure i am ready to ask yet
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The Shadow
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i like this
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I love.....
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awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww
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Warm Salt
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sad sad sad
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