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Topic: Egg Salad
Differentkindofwench Joined Sat 04/07/07 Posts: 5960	Tue 10/20/09 03:03 PM
Egg Salad The smooth facade Of the hardened shell Enabling all to slide off Until In the solitude Of your kitchen, You crack and crumble. Peeling away the shell Revealing skin Pockmarked and naked. You huddle in your bowl of regret. Emotions churning and ripping As you slice and dice through the replay of your day. Adding salt to the wounds And peppering your soul With thoughts of should haves. This won’t do. You have to hold it together. Mayonnaise your malaise. Sandwiched between Home cooked bouts of belief In the egg salad of life.

kc0003 Joined Fri 05/11/07 Posts: 26382	Tue 10/20/09 03:10 PM
remind me to never enter your kitchen...well, unless you need help cleaning up. then, you know i would be more than happy to what ever happened to those robots they always promised us? you know the ones that were going to make all of our lives soooo much easier. oh well i guess we have to rely on ourselves....

Differentkindofwench Joined Sat 04/07/07 Posts: 5960	Tue 10/20/09 03:22 PM
(Cackles in delight) You realize, you make me sound like the witch in Hansel and Gretel, right? Deep curtsy of appreciation though we both know it's just my shell.

kc0003 Joined Fri 05/11/07 Posts: 26382	Tue 10/20/09 03:30 PM
no not at all...i see you more as the mad hatter but with a bit more wit...lol...and a bit more shell...

Sharris Joined Sun 12/10/06 Posts: 7300	Tue 10/20/09 03:46 PM
Egg Salad The smooth facade Of the hardened shell Enabling all to slide off Until In the solitude Of your kitchen, You crack and crumble. Peeling away the shell Revealing skin Pockmarked and naked. You huddle in your bowl of regret. Emotions churning and ripping As you slice and dice through the replay of your day. Adding salt to the wounds And peppering your soul With thoughts of should haves. This won’t do. You have to hold it together. Mayonnaise your malaise. Sandwiched between Home cooked bouts of belief In the egg salad of life. served with, and a comfort

HuckleberryFinn Joined Wed 09/23/09 Posts: 753	Tue 10/20/09 04:25 PM
Pockmarked ^nice word choice, loved the image and the relation to the days experiences...nice

BYondLife Joined Sat 10/10/09 Posts: 1364	Tue 10/20/09 04:59 PM
Blech! I hate egg salad. Loved the poem it was beautiful.. I just don't like egg salad..

jimz Joined Sun 06/24/07 Posts: 2365	Tue 10/20/09 06:23 PM
Egg Salad The smooth facade Of the hardened shell Enabling all to slide off Until In the solitude Of your kitchen, You crack and crumble. Peeling away the shell Revealing skin Pockmarked and naked. You huddle in your bowl of regret. Emotions churning and ripping As you slice and dice through the replay of your day. Adding salt to the wounds And peppering your soul With thoughts of should haves. This won’t do. You have to hold it together. Mayonnaise your malaise. Sandwiched between Home cooked bouts of belief In the egg salad of life. wow!

nvkikigirl Joined Thu 03/05/09 Posts: 3942	Tue 10/20/09 07:45 PM
great piece!! i enjoyed it... "Mayonnaise your malaise"--love this...

Differentkindofwench Joined Sat 04/07/07 Posts: 5960	Tue 10/20/09 09:39 PM
no not at all...i see you more as the mad hatter but with a bit more wit...lol...and a bit more shell... "mustard, don't let's be silly", a shelled hatter, lmao

Differentkindofwench Joined Sat 04/07/07 Posts: 5960	Tue 10/20/09 09:40 PM
I made egg salad today and yup, it was a comfort and then this popped into my head, sooooo TA-DAAAAA, I played.

Differentkindofwench Joined Sat 04/07/07 Posts: 5960	Tue 10/20/09 09:41 PM
Pockmarked ^nice word choice, loved the image and the relation to the days experiences...nice I was pretty proud I spelled it right this time, so thanks!

Differentkindofwench Joined Sat 04/07/07 Posts: 5960	Tue 10/20/09 09:41 PM
Pockmarked ^nice word choice, loved the image and the relation to the days experiences...nice I was pretty proud I spelled it right this time, so thanks!

Differentkindofwench Joined Sat 04/07/07 Posts: 5960	Tue 10/20/09 09:43 PM
Blech! I hate egg salad. Loved the poem it was beautiful.. I just don't like egg salad.. Then you are exempt from consuming and thank you!

Differentkindofwench Joined Sat 04/07/07 Posts: 5960	Tue 10/20/09 09:44 PM
Thanks, nvk, it was a fun write.

Fusion99 Joined Thu 07/09/09 Posts: 927	Wed 10/21/09 06:56 AM
Egg Salad The smooth facade Of the hardened shell Enabling all to slide off Until In the solitude Of your kitchen, You crack and crumble. Peeling away the shell Revealing skin Pockmarked and naked. You huddle in your bowl of regret. Emotions churning and ripping As you slice and dice through the replay of your day. Adding salt to the wounds And peppering your soul With thoughts of should haves. This won’t do. You have to hold it together. Mayonnaise your malaise. Sandwiched between Home cooked bouts of belief In the egg salad of life. THIS IS PERFECT!!! LOVE the 'mayonnaise your malaise" line, loved the whole thing, great job

Differentkindofwench Joined Sat 04/07/07 Posts: 5960	Wed 10/21/09 10:07 AM
I couldn't figure out how to incorporate the mayonnaise, so I just dumped it in like ya do with egg salad Lovely to see you, BTW.

pkh Joined Sat 05/26/07 Posts: 14961	Wed 10/21/09 10:43 AM
you always amaze me

MzEm Joined Wed 03/25/09 Posts: 1558	Wed 10/21/09 01:21 PM
Goodness girl I love it!

Fusion99 Joined Thu 07/09/09 Posts: 927	Wed 10/21/09 02:58 PM
I couldn't figure out how to incorporate the mayonnaise, so I just dumped it in like ya do with egg salad Lovely to see you, BTW. Thanks different, Ive been away talking with someone, but Im back now to infect the poetry forum with my own special brand of malaise