Ok everyone I was debating to post this one but tell me what you think...

As I lay here thinking
of you and, wondering when
the right time to tell you
that I have simply fallen
for you.That I will give you
my heart and all if you only
would show me just a hint of
your love for me.If you would
just give me a sign that you
are into me as I am into you.
For I would hand over my heart
body and soul on a platter to
you with no doubt in my mind
that you are and always will
be mine...

By:Shannon (Sasfire75)

Very good

Very nice.

sweet

Ty silk and ty aikido

well written. Very nice.

ty sweetie

Very nice Sas!

LOVE IT!!!

very nice

ty sharon,fairy,and pkh ty for the comments

Very nice...

ty teddy

Hey Sasfire... loved the poem... 99% perfect... (almost as good as you) lol.

The only thing I noticed, is that you might be missing an
"is",
Somewhere in here:

As I lay here thinking
of you and, wondering when
the right time to tell you

other then that, no criticism on this one... I think that you've mastered it already!

Nice. It reminds the reader of how unconditional love can be.

Ahhhh my sweet shannon most beautiful lil lady......And the man that nabs you will truly be blessed.....You have a heart the size of the universe....

ty very much froznchild (and ty for the great compliment)

Very beautiful sas, I told you you could write..

ty so much Deb but it's you and your thread that has made me really come out of my shell

LOL ty Daniel sweetie it took a long time to get that one out of me though there is another one if you want to read it just look for it is here somewhere