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Topic: Hi all First time here (be nice) LOL
ChevyLover Joined Mon 12/24/07 Posts: 215	Sun 03/02/08 03:59 PM
Short but sweet, one of my first ones This little thing came to me the other day While throwing rocks in the lake The waves I make are like my mind Reaching out, with no one to find One day, the waves will meet Making my life complete

MsTeddyBear2u Joined Fri 04/06/07 Posts: 22031	Sun 03/02/08 04:01 PM
Short and sweet poem! Welcome to the poetry section!

ChevyLover Joined Mon 12/24/07 Posts: 215	Sun 03/02/08 04:02 PM
Thank you! Comments? Please be blunt!

Jim519 Joined Thu 12/27/07 Posts: 9203	Sun 03/02/08 04:05 PM
Do you want blunt? Or Nice? Which one?

ChevyLover Joined Mon 12/24/07 Posts: 215	Sun 03/02/08 04:06 PM
I want blunt honesty on what I write!

Jim519 Joined Thu 12/27/07 Posts: 9203	Sun 03/02/08 04:07 PM
Good luck!

Waltercool Joined Mon 01/28/08 Posts: 784	Sun 03/02/08 04:09 PM
pritty good, short, direct, and sencitive! good on you! keep it up!

James1234567 Joined Sun 01/06/08 Posts: 2589	Sun 03/02/08 04:14 PM
got one

Fadedspirit Joined Sun 12/23/07 Posts: 1681	Sun 03/02/08 04:50 PM
nice write.

pkh Joined Sat 05/26/07 Posts: 14961	Sun 03/02/08 08:06 PM
very good hope you find it

TxsGal3333 Joined Tue 09/05/06 Posts: 76433	Sun 03/02/08 08:14 PM
short and sweet but to the point good one

lurchs_sister Joined Mon 10/08/07 Posts: 9433	Sun 03/02/08 08:16 PM
on the money again and i like it!

FroznChild Joined Tue 02/19/08 Posts: 2228	Sun 03/02/08 11:47 PM
What can one say about poetry written in the past? Excellent, short poem, but, any criticism might cause one to change orginality... I like the poem as it is... Maybe looking back from the future, to the past, like you can now... you might add more of a story line... But, some would say it's a masterpiece, as it is.

ChevyLover Joined Mon 12/24/07 Posts: 215	Mon 03/17/08 05:25 PM
I respect the truth (all) If I can not grow from what I write, what have I gained? I trust all of you to guide me with your opinions and help! I am not a pro, I will ask for help and would want 100+% honesty! Please "bring it"

ChevyLover Joined Mon 12/24/07 Posts: 215	Mon 03/17/08 05:31 PM
If I came across as mean/mad NO. I just want 100+% honesty! Please let me know! I hope I am not ticking people off LOL! Frozn, Thanks! I like your words too!

pkh Joined Sat 05/26/07 Posts: 14961	Mon 03/17/08 06:28 PM
Short but sweet, one of my first ones This little thing came to me the other day While throwing rocks in the lake The waves I make are like my mind Reaching out, with no one to find One day, the waves will meet Making my life complete Well for one of your first it was very good.I feel like that myself sometimes,you got your point across and we have to believe that one day the waves will meet

Sweet_and_Sassy Joined Fri 07/06/07 Posts: 217	Mon 03/17/08 06:44 PM
I love it....

2Btrue2One Joined Wed 06/13/07 Posts: 2447	Tue 03/18/08 02:58 AM
Not bad for first write chevy, I will say you do have talent, no mater if what you write is short or not.. there's a lot of meaning in that short poem of yours.. welcome to poetry..

pkh Joined Sat 05/26/07 Posts: 14961	Tue 03/18/08 03:45 AM
Not bad for first write chevy, I will say you do have talent, no mater if what you write is short or not.. there's a lot of meaning in that short poem of yours.. welcome to poetry.. I agree with Daniel a lot of meaning

ChevyLover Joined Mon 12/24/07 Posts: 215	Tue 03/18/08 04:43 PM
I thank you all and I hope you enjoy!