As I walked along tonight, a comet flashed across the sky.
A light so bright it blinded me, and almost made me cry
My heart skipped a beat, then stopped and breathe my lungs denied
And though my mind said friendship...my heart thinks mayhap I lied
This soul I fear is kindered, and yet isn't mine to take
But I feel that I've been sleeping, and that with his kiss I'd wake
And I see the castles that I've built, slowly turn to dust
As I feel a soul tug deep inside that has not to do with lust
Oh comet dearest, shining bright, up in this dark night's sky
Will you fall for me tonight...or will you pass me by?

IT IS GETTING CLOSURE TO U TRUST FAITH IS IMPORTANT

<--thinking of playing hookie and skipping out of work

no ryithem at all... needs work

I know, but i promised to post before sleeping, and I've been awake for quite some time

A poem does not need to have rhythm to be beautiful or be a good write… just needs to have heart and soul… and all of your writings do.

i dont even need to say anything else... the other people on this site are going to eat you alive. They wont like someone who is so mean.

i never said I was good honey...i just write what is inside me so that it doesnt fester...it helps me think. can I see some of yours?

oh dear...I never meant for this to get so ugly...I'm sorry... next time I'll do better lmao

you did just fine jodi,

thanks ((((DANA))))

there is only one person who needs to like it, and he wont care how bad it is...

(((jodi)))

ur right he wont

lucky or not: there are many good writers on here, we dont need everyone to like what we write, or how its written , we dont put it here for everyone to like, but to express how we are feeling, so what if the form isnt good, or someone doesnt like the flow of our words, its not why we write them,

there is critism, and then there is plain rude,

ladies I have read both of your writings and they are as beautiful as you are... pay no attention to the guy behind the curtain ....

om GOODNESS hahahaha



i wouldn't change a thing
beautiful

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Thanks
Site Mod
Kristi

thanks kritsi

I THINK...........THIS WAS BEAUTIFUL AND TASTEFUL.....YOU KEEP ON WRITING GIRL PAY NO ATTENTION TO SOMEONE WHOM ONLY POSTED TWICE, WE HERE AT JSH ARE YOUR FRIENDS AND WE WILL BACK YOU ANY WAY WE CAN,..........HUZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZ,
YOUR FRIEND ALWAYS,

(((noden))) thanks you honor me