Jimmy tried to make a friend,
He’d scrounge things from the shed,
Some wires, pipes and bits of metal,
The element from some old kettle,
A TV which had met its end,
Would make a perfect head.

A computer Jimmy’d take apart,
From the circuits make a brain,
Two cameras could be used for eyes,
A drainpipe chopped in half for thighs,
A wind-up clock would be his heart,
His friend would feel no pain.

He laboured at his robot chum,
For one year and a season,
But Jimmy’s friend, once completed,
Only sat and looked defeated,
When asked why he was so glum,
Replied “I have no reason”.

Jimmy wept, became distraught,
His heart began to soften,
He could never teach this metal chappie,
To feel love or to be happy,
Then to Jim there came a thought,
“I should get out more often”.

thats really good

Thanks!

Awesome piece Pete, would like to see more

That was really cool. I hope you have more to come

Thanks for the replies!
Yeah, I'll be writing and posting more when inspiriation hits me. It's nice to hear positive feedback on my poems - I know it's not REAL poetry like some, but I like to be lighthearted and funny on the surface with just a little bit of sadness and darkness underneath (just like me!)
Thank you so much!

Kewl!

Hiya Pete, welcome to the site...

Neat!

Great imagery and writing. Keep writing.

Well first of all I will say I have the same view as CCP would like to see more of what you write this is very good.

And yes the image was there as Jimmy put his friend together piece by piece.

Ohhh and to your statement below:

(I know it's not REAL poetry like some, but I like to be lighthearted and funny on the surface with just a little bit of sadness and darkness underneath (just like me!)


Who is to say what is poetry and what is not. I had someone tell me a while back that poetry is when one sits down and upon the page they write the words from there heart. There are so many styles it is unreal some rhyme some don't. Poetry is from the soul and the feelings of the heart. That you write down upon the page and share with others. Some are not poems at all but more like a short story. We all like diffenet types also. My self I tend to stick with what I can relate to in real life. Even tho I have been told to out of my fansty world and into the real world.lmao Because the way sometimes I picture love well it don't always happen that way. SSSsssssshhhs no duhhh. lol


Really would like to see you post more.

Thank you so much for your kind words!
I'll get on with writing some more ASAP
It's so nice to hear positive feedback about my stuff! Everyone's so kind here!
Thank you :)

" I know it's not REAL poetry like some, but I like to be lighthearted and funny on the surface with just a little bit of sadness and darkness underneath (just like me!)"

What makes it not real? Its your thoughts, emotions and passions laid out on paper...nothing more real than that babe...this was a good write...reminded me of Rickie Lee Jones for some reason .... I enjoyed it immensely~

Wiz

oh, all your pieces are so wonderful. this really is true to your heart baby.

I liked it! A chuckle, a tear and a great "constuction" of thought. Get out more often? That's just a given, but we do like it when you're in and bringing us a smile

Good show!

hey cool i love your pic no psychos

I agree...very nice.

Awwwwwwwwwww The humble me. Surrounded by beauty and honored by the presense of such great friends