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Topic: Heaven Offers Nothing More Divine
GYs41 Joined Thu 09/05/13 Posts: 149	Tue 09/24/13 03:24 AM
Heaven offers nothing more divine. Praise those few who now begin to pray That love in all its glory does survive When vicious hate to tolerance gives sway. As gaps between us grow to valleys wide The birth of war emerges from its womb And thoughts turned fears ignite the great divide. The self will all the masses soon consume And at the altar of indignant pride Will lead to nothing less than bitter doom.

tommyboy1101 Joined Sat 11/24/12 Posts: 1352	Tue 09/24/13 07:45 AM
Yep!!!!! Well spoken, GYs. tommy boy ===

GYs41 Joined Thu 09/05/13 Posts: 149	Tue 09/24/13 08:30 AM
Thanks, Tommy. I put this out to demonstrate rhythm and meter to someone. Yes, line one is a different rhythm than the rest of the poem, and line two throws a curve ball with the first word, but such is artistic liberty. Glad you enjoyed it. G.

teasingbrunette Joined Tue 05/26/09 Posts: 5449	Tue 09/24/13 12:19 PM
..I've read this aloud,three times...the last line seals the deal everytime,for me.

KiK2me Joined Sun 01/06/13 Posts: 8732	Tue 09/24/13 03:13 PM
Lasting peace...is unfortunately the side effect of IMPASSABLE stalemate... Make war no more... Good write pard !

littlelambkin Joined Mon 02/25/13 Posts: 92	Tue 09/24/13 08:12 PM
I shake my head and wonder; how in the world does he do that? I am in awe!

pkh Joined Sat 05/26/07 Posts: 14961	Wed 09/25/13 06:08 AM
Another amazing write

GYs41 Joined Thu 09/05/13 Posts: 149	Wed 09/25/13 06:11 AM
Thank you, everyone. I greatly appreciate the kind words.

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