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Is it too long or short? Is there something interesting you'd like to read more about? Is any part dull? Did something in it make you smile? Do you feel it gives a sense of who I am? Please let me know of any misspellings.
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Mixed signals..main pic is with a woman while
your headline says you seek one. I am going to guess, as I don't know you, that it reflects you all the way, from what I have seen you express on the forums. I did smile, with a bit of a head shake at the same time :-) As I forgot to check for misspellings, I shall go back and look, if I don't come back, it's good. Edit: Saw just one, Nightclubing=Nightclubbing. (But I am one of those speed-read freaks that can see a word with just a couple letters correct so I would not rely on me.) |
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I like it Scoundrel
(I thought you were already taken) |
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I like it Scoundrel (I thought you were already taken) That may be changing. She's on probation right now. |
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It's too long. I'd shorten it a bit.
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It's too long. I'd shorten it a bit. Interesting. I was thinking it wasn't long enough. It's only about 550 words and long sales letters are proven to work better than short ones. But, thanks for your thought. |
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Short ads tend to be more effective than longer ones.
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Edited by
42BlackBBW
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Sat 06/30/12 02:02 AM
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I may have misinterpreted your first para but IMO, it’s an inaccurate assumption made against those (who read)your profile wouldn't attract anyway - waste of words.
Your pics a little confusing to. Obviously shows honesty, wit, intelligence, a certain charm about you and self appreciation is not always perceived as a negative. Constructively, I liked the first half better than the second - it's too long and IMO, the second bit after "I love sex" doesn't do you any favours. Liked the last para though. I lost points – I had to look it up |
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Edited by
42BlackBBW
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Sat 06/30/12 01:59 AM
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Totage: Wow..what a lovely surprise...the outside matches the inside. Think I'm gonna swoon now |
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Thanks to everyone for their thoughts. I'm truly grateful.
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Totage: Wow..what a lovely surprise...the outside matches the inside. Think I'm gonna swoon now TY :) I had to take the suit to the cleaners, and I thought I'd get a nice clean shave as well. :P ;) |
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I think the profile is to long. I would rather just read a little about you on the profile and if interested I would message and we would still have something to talk bout lol. If you put up something to long me speaking for myself wouldn't wanna sit there and read it all. :)
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It's too long. I'd shorten it a bit. that's what she said |
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Edited by
PacificStar48
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Tue 07/03/12 10:12 AM
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Bit long. Seems to capture your personality then sounds like you are trying to convince yourself it is ok. Talking about Ex's would make me back up if I were thinking about contacting you. You often make me smile, or think which is not a bad thing, but sometimes I am not sure I am not just thinking Oh Gheese he really said that?
Oh the lead pic is not the greatest with your hand up; it is distracting. |
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