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Extremely beautiful?
Is that what she is? You want to meet her? Be my guest! What am I? A housekeeper? Taxi Service? Your Assistant? Cheating is personal and I won’t soon forget it. When did I lose my beauty? Affair #1? #2? #3? I’m sure there are others, yet known to me! You think you're slick? Think you’re a “G”? You covet friend’s wives? This aint news to me! Go play your games and have your fun! In the end, I now know, you only live your life for one! The years will go by and you will see, the only best friend you’ve had, was me! I knew secrets and truths yet loved you still, damning myself for my weakness of will! Hold fast to these fantasy’s you portray, to these women you try to impress, lies endearing them and come what may. Your head lying on your pillow, 20 years from now, alone and God willing, you will finally understand the why and how. |
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wow, gut wrenching, yet so true to so many people's lives. Amazing write, an emotional journey
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Grand journey
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very nice...
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Ummm, WOW! Although the poem did not have anything to do with me personally, I felt so deep within for your sorrows. It was certainly a wonderfully written collective of emotions that it made it feel so personal to me.
Absolutely fantastic writing, and I could only hope to do such within myself to write a wonderfully laid out and descriptive collection of words to describe my current feelings. Thank you so much for sharing although... as I have said... none of it had applied to me. None the less, it had blown my mind. Please, keep it up! - Josh |
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Wow this sounds so personal. Your work seems to be filled with lots of emotions. If this is a personal issue I truly hope that you find happiness after such pain.
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Thanks everyone. Having said what I needed to-I feel better. It's nice to be heard.
L |
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a power punch, grabs you by the heart and doesn't let go, loved it!!
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Not sure what to say,
Appreciate your words being shared Good write |
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I feel your pain,,I've lived your pain,
I wish EVERY man and woman could be cheated on ONE TIME HARD,,, Then I don't believe WE would have the cheaters out herethat we do. Like abuse,,,ONCE YOU HAVE LIVED TO RECIEVE IT....YOU DON'T WANT TO GIVE IT OUT... I guess some never learn,,but the many who just feel that being hurt isn't a BIG DEAL,,,THEN THEY NEVER REALLY LOVED YET! Another good write Laura.... |
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like that poem
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Sound like my ex wife
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Nice write! I love how you didn't stick to a structured format. I try to write visually and it bugs the hell out of me and I format it, again!
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