I cared about you more than myself,
I hoped we could be together for eternity.
Sad state of affairs leaving choice to fate,
As if some greater being would help me out.
Did I think God would answer now, then?
When before it didn't seem like he gave a damn?
Did I really believe he would pull me through?

If only,
As if,

Maybe now I wouldn't be left with this hole,
Where my heart once was, could still be.
Hoping the next ring might be your call,
Foolishly hoping we could let the past be.

If only,
As if,

Did you hold on the words only to let go?
Or did you wait for me to be the one to call?
These questions will never lead to answers,
I'm just cutting myself too deep on this one,
You gave me something I never thought I could feel,
And took it away like it will be the only time I ever will.

If only,
As if,

Maybe now I wouldn't be left with this hole,
Where my heart once was, could still be.
Hoping the next ring might be your call,
Foolishly hoping we could let the past be.

If only,
As if,

We could have wrote this story differently,
Perhaps a happy ending to this tragedy,
If only, as if, things never end like this,
Not for me...if only, as if...

***I personally think I repeated the title entirely too much, but it is more of a hinge vocal, something that would sound frustrated but in a more timid sense until it hits the end...then let it go, still wondering if I should have repeated it as much as I did though.***

I loved it !!!

so relate,.. doesn`t matter how many times you repeat,. cause

when you have a that`s all you do,.. is go over & over & over it again

so very appropiate

The repitition works, you need a break or pause to go to the next set, and I agree with May777, good job!

I like

Personally I think you did fine as to the number of repeats. Nice write

In Ok, I heard the wind through the cracks in my little house, it would whistle and in the worst of winter, howl. That is what I felt in your writing, the wind, relentless in its reminder..

yep fear, she hit it on the nose for me.....excellent lyrics!

I think this is wonderful. It's hard when you want more from someone than they know how to give. The repeats don't really matter. What matters is the soul there. Once again, you're brilliant

Thank you all, your comments are much appreciated. I'm still inbetween with this write, I kind of feel the repitition becomes redundant near the end and especially in the last stanza where it is repeated twice over.

anything worth repeating, is just that

bob seger was asked about that once and he simply stated that one can not repeat the title of the song too many times. so...

Indeed, but I'm finnicky about my writing. Even though by all standards this lyric is solid, it still for some odd reason doesn't look right to me.

i totally get that...let it resonate for a day or two...the answer will come

That's what I'm doing, I don't want to really do anything to it. Even if I did edit anything, I would keep the original as I always do. The last one I wrote I had three different versions of before settling on one of them.