Topic: a challenge
sami714's photo
Thu 03/05/09 05:06 PM

and so I say to myself do not do this
open your heart and you will receive a beating
hope for love and you will be disheartened
soon enough you will be rejected
you will be worst off then you once started
rather to be admired from a distance
than to be scoffed up close
do not do this

it is hard to keep up appearances
a mans eyes are not always complacent
and easily they are offended by imperfections
in his heart I have no right to be but be for him
his eyes are likely to wander and they easily unconvinced
and certainly they are aggrieved by fault
he is natures foremost critic
and as for us women we are different
but no better
we too are at fault

so better for I to be as an acquaintance
even so a man seeks comeliness in his companion
he does not want to be seen with a lesser beauty
his image rests upon me
what a burden

so I say leave me be
I only want to be your friend a platonic relation
his lips says yes but in his heart he loves provocation
he feels that he is equipped to the challenge
so what am I to do
©


no photo
Thu 03/05/09 05:24 PM
Reminds me of a few friends I know, who are only but Trophies for their partners...

Nice write by the way... flowerforyou

no photo
Thu 03/05/09 05:36 PM
Sad that many will fail to see the inner beauty of a persons heart. This is nice sami, thanks for sharing and welcome to the poetry forum. flowerforyou flowerforyou

no photo
Thu 03/05/09 05:42 PM
That was very heart felt flowerforyou
Welcome to the poetry section:heart:
may it help enlighten your heart and soul:heart: :heart: flowerforyou

Sharris's photo
Thu 03/05/09 05:58 PM
Edited by Sharris on Thu 03/05/09 05:59 PM


and so I say to myself do not do this
open your heart and you will receive a beating
hope for love and you will be disheartened
soon enough you will be rejected
you will be worst off then you once started
rather to be admired from a distance
than to be scoffed up close
do not do this

it is hard to keep up appearances
a mans eyes are not always complacent
and easily they are offended by imperfections
in his heart I have no right to be but be for him
his eyes are likely to wander and they easily unconvinced
and certainly they are aggrieved by fault
he is natures foremost critic
and as for us women we are different
but no better
we too are at fault

so better for I to be as an acquaintance
even so a man seeks comeliness in his companion
he does not want to be seen with a lesser beauty
his image rests upon me
what a burden

so I say leave me be
I only want to be your friend a platonic relation
his lips says yes but in his heart he loves provocation
he feels that he is equipped to the challenge
so what am I to do
©



The shadows stream
and leave their veil
pensive bleeds, revealing
a lesser beauty
is not from his eye
perhaps only
his heart's deception.

Raine Les 3/5/2009
Thank You


sami714's photo
Thu 03/05/09 06:40 PM
thanks everyone your comments mean so much to me :)

sami714's photo
Thu 03/05/09 06:43 PM
Edited by sami714 on Thu 03/05/09 06:43 PM
that is beautiful and amazing Sharris :) flowerforyou

kc0003's photo
Thu 03/05/09 06:52 PM
Edited by kc0003 on Thu 03/05/09 06:53 PM


and so I say to myself do not do this
open your heart and you will receive a beating
hope for love and you will be disheartened
soon enough you will be rejected
you will be worst off then you once started
rather to be admired from a distance
than to be scoffed up close
do not do this

it is hard to keep up appearances
a mans eyes are not always complacent
and easily they are offended by imperfections
in his heart I have no right to be but be for him
his eyes are likely to wander and they easily unconvinced
and certainly they are aggrieved by fault
he is natures foremost critic
and as for us women we are different
but no better
we too are at fault

so better for I to be as an acquaintance
even so a man seeks comeliness in his companion
he does not want to be seen with a lesser beauty
his image rests upon me
what a burden

so I say leave me be
I only want to be your friend a platonic relation
his lips says yes but in his heart he loves provocation
he feels that he is equipped to the challenge
so what am I to do
©






very nice, once again...

there is passion in the things you write and i can feel the emotion in you...
very human and very real

cant wait to read more...

flowerforyou flowerforyou flowerforyou


MirrorMirror's photo
Thu 03/05/09 06:57 PM


and so I say to myself do not do this
open your heart and you will receive a beating
hope for love and you will be disheartened
soon enough you will be rejected
you will be worst off then you once started
rather to be admired from a distance
than to be scoffed up close
do not do this

it is hard to keep up appearances
a mans eyes are not always complacent
and easily they are offended by imperfections
in his heart I have no right to be but be for him
his eyes are likely to wander and they easily unconvinced
and certainly they are aggrieved by fault
he is natures foremost critic
and as for us women we are different
but no better
we too are at fault

so better for I to be as an acquaintance
even so a man seeks comeliness in his companion
he does not want to be seen with a lesser beauty
his image rests upon me
what a burden

so I say leave me be
I only want to be your friend a platonic relation
his lips says yes but in his heart he loves provocation
he feels that he is equipped to the challenge
so what am I to do
©








flowers


s1owhand's photo
Fri 03/06/09 02:57 AM
she steps towards him
she is shy
standing there
a little tired
it's been a long
day, night, month, year

he sees her
overwhelming quiet beauty
he warmth
is static electricity

moving close
hands slide around a waist
arms drape across shoulders
splayed fingers in my hair
touching softness
at first at outstanding curves

then pulling closely
tightly pressing
warmth builds to heat
modeling clay
touching everywhere

(((sami714)))

flowerforyou

pkh's photo
Fri 03/06/09 05:16 AM
very heartfelt,I can feel the emotion in you.Nice add Slow

s1owhand's photo
Fri 03/06/09 09:06 AM
:wink: errr... "her warmth" oops whoa

Differentkindofwench's photo
Fri 03/06/09 10:01 AM
Your words reveal what your survival traits cannot yet fathom.
Keep working at it, those comfortable veils of disbelief will lift allowing you to soar over foreign soil your mirror will reveal and then you find-------the you you suspect but cannot yet accept.

Okay, I'm done rambling. Beautiful write!

no photo
Fri 03/06/09 12:33 PM
Full of emotion, this truly moved me.flowerforyou flowerforyou