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Topic: Behind closed doors
joethebricky Joined Sat 08/04/12 Posts: 12740	Mon 08/14/17 11:53 AM
Loneliness surrounds a life out of tune, darkness engulfs an invisible wound Infested waters on an island marooned, waiting for the bagman, your arms to balloon The Crocker shapes your life with no regret for his hewn, from the devil, no one's immune Singing songs from childhood A Bitter sweet note From the cradle a life of turmoil, silent whimpers at night Terrorised while watching a black and blue mummy having to put up a fight The prodigal son in the grip of Kryptonite, a life spent trying to shake off the spite Singing songs from childhood A bitter sweet note Is it any wonder your half, not a whole, feet still burned from walking hot coal To the outside world he played a good role, behind closed doors an innocence stole As the crowd gathers and the church bells toll, Satan smiles and takes another lost soul Singing songs from childhood A bitter sweet note

lu_rosemary Joined Wed 09/11/13 Posts: 9123	Mon 08/14/17 12:04 PM Edited by lu_rosemary on Mon 08/14/17 12:13 PM
Sometimes the bittersweet note it's part of our life. I love your poem, Joe. Childhood now, what a beautiful memory.

mzrosie Joined Wed 08/14/13 Posts: 33997	Mon 08/14/17 12:29 PM
Poignant.. gave me goosebumps Thank you for sharing, joe

wellworn Joined Wed 09/14/16 Posts: 4587	Mon 08/14/17 01:02 PM
Joe what can I say Joe, would you mind if I try and fit in and around your words, my own attempt of some Floydian Guitar licks.

joethebricky Joined Sat 08/04/12 Posts: 12740	Mon 08/14/17 07:47 PM
Thank you people. Wellworn please feel free

technovative Joined Sat 03/01/14 Posts: 2644	Thu 08/17/17 08:24 PM
Grim imagery that coveys somber feelings. Powerful piece, Joe.

swagsadda Joined Sun 07/23/17 Posts: 1	Thu 08/17/17 09:05 PM
nice

wellworn Joined Wed 09/14/16 Posts: 4587	Tue 08/29/17 12:44 AM
Still working on it Joe, can't compete,but fun trying

TxsGal3333 Joined Tue 09/05/06 Posts: 76453	Tue 08/29/17 06:27 AM
Very powerful~~~ Loneliness behind closed doors can consume a person~~~~

ameercommoner Joined Sun 12/27/09 Posts: 118	Tue 08/29/17 07:06 AM
Poignant is right. Powerful and moving. Thank you joe.

Ladywind7 Joined Sun 04/08/12 Posts: 7833	Fri 09/15/17 01:49 PM
Was this someone you knew? It is a tragedy to read, hits home for many I am sure.

no1phD Joined Tue 01/07/14 Posts: 27442	Fri 09/15/17 04:10 PM
All the things I get up to Behind Closed Doors...lol.. oops my bad this isn't a regular topic.. sorry

Unknow Joined Mon 11/05/07 Posts: 64077	Sat 09/23/17 06:20 AM
Beautifully done... Thank you for sharing, Joe...

theseacoast Joined Wed 07/09/14 Posts: 7419	Fri 09/29/17 01:04 PM
Oh my... Speachless, Joe. So strong. My first reaction - desire to comfort, to dispel the darknes, to lit a light... Thank you for sharing

no1phD Joined Tue 01/07/14 Posts: 27442	Fri 09/29/17 01:09 PM
Oh dang it I thought this was going to be some kind of kinky thread about what people do behind closed doors . Not a total loss .. great poem

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