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Topic: My First attempt.
SitkaRains's photo
Fri 09/25/15 09:22 AM
I am not sure how many of you know that the one thing, I am so envious of the gift and talent people have with the written word. With the help of a dear friend, Dread.. I have have taken the plunge to attempt
to enter this magical realm.

This is about a special dog. Please critique me so that I can grow.
Thank you all...


Lilly's Limerick
I know and love a Dog named Lilly
She is really quite silly
I will give you the scoop
She will eat others poop
And I know you think this verse quite Dilly

Datwasntme's photo
Fri 09/25/15 09:27 AM
no kissed from Lilly for me

thanks for the smile : )
i liked it

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Fri 09/25/15 09:28 AM
Edited by Dreadaye on Fri 09/25/15 10:12 AM
... And dreadaye is blushing because you kept your word although not the full detail of the tale as I know it :smile: . The desire & talent are yours and the object of your undoubted affection no less than an especially dear & beloved best friend of humans the world over.

Minute by minute you refined the purpose for sharing this heartfelt homage with us. Till Lilly was no longer just a doggie so silly as dine on the cast out waste of her own kind.

You stuck to the task, querying the nature of limerick and verse, about which I confessed to knowing nought save for that which I feel in the flow of words. And we conversed. And I shed tears for the tone of love you sought to capture, Faithful to your own purpose, you drafted & re-redrafted till Lilly's tale began to wag right off the page and into our hearts.

So yes, dreadaye takes a bow and exits stage right out of sight! Lilly unseen, centres herself in our hearts as all doggie's do. And you Sitka, you backed yourself to capture a bounding emotion in a
simple limerick.

Lilly lives! Immortalised through the sincerity of your efforts.
So reign Sitka, reign in the kingdom to come at the behest of your mind and pen.
Dance sweet sister, Dance the dance of parchment and pen-strokes,
Those two keepers of Ancient secrets from a time when all we did was tell each other stories.

Yes, the season is good, can you feel it?

Regards

Aye'm dread ...but not by nature.

Namaste!

SitkaRains's photo
Fri 09/25/15 09:32 AM
Edited by SitkaRains on Fri 09/25/15 10:07 AM


... And dreadaye is blushing because you kept your word although not the full detail of the tale as I know itl. The desire & talent are yours and the object of your undoubted affection no less than an especially dear & beloved best friend of humans the world over.

Minute by minute you refined the purpose for sharing this heartfelt homage with us. Till Dilly was no longer just a doggie so silly as dine on the cast out waste of her own kind.

You stuck to the task, querying the nature of limerick and verse, about which I confessed to knowing nought save for that which I feel in the flow of words. And we conversed. And I shed tears for the tone of love you sought to capture, Faithful to your own purpose, you drafted & re-redrafted till Dilly's tale began to wag right off the page and into our hearts.

So yes, dreadaye takes a bow and exits stage right out of sight! Dilly unseen, centres herself in our hearts as all doggie's do. And you Sitka, you backed yourself to capture a bounding emotion in a simple limerick.

Dilly lives! Immortalised through the sincerity of your efforts.
So reign Sitka, reign in the kingdom to come at the behest of your mind and pen.
Dance sweet sister, Dance the dance of parchment and pen-strokes,
Those two keepers of Ancient secrets from a time when all we did was tell each other stories.

Yes, the season is good, can you feel it?

Regards

Aye'm dread ...but not by nature.

Namaste!
Why wouldn't I keep my word..
I couldn't get it quite right and I am not sure if I would have quit without your help and positivity.

You knew my inner fear with this realm.
I am so looking forward to my month by the sea to explore and see what I can come up with.:heart: flowerforyou

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Fri 09/25/15 09:42 AM
laugh

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Fri 09/25/15 09:44 AM
I like it, its sweet and cute. flowers

kuldeep777's photo
Fri 09/25/15 09:47 AM
hi

TxsGal3333's photo
Fri 09/25/15 09:58 AM
There is nothing better then the love of our fur buddies....

It took me several years ago for someone to get me to post a poem once I started I took off. Just have not wrote any in quite some time.. It just takes the first step..:thumbsup:


corkie49's photo
Fri 09/25/15 10:27 AM

I am not sure how many of you know that the one thing, I am so envious of the gift and talent people have with the written word. With the help of a dear friend, Dread.. I have have taken the plunge to attempt
to enter this magical realm.

This is about a special dog. Please critique me so that I can grow.
Thank you all...


Lilly's Limerick
I know and love a Dog named Lilly
She is really quite silly
I will give you the scoop
She will eat others poop
And I know you think this verse quite Dilly


Very good,keep it upwaving

corkie49's photo
Fri 09/25/15 10:29 AM

There is nothing better then the love of our fur buddies....

It took me several years ago for someone to get me to post a poem once I started I took off. Just have not wrote any in quite some time.. It just takes the first step..:thumbsup:



Go on give it another go...drinks

Ladywind7's photo
Fri 09/25/15 01:58 PM
lol, nice to see your witty offerings flowerforyou

Annierooroo's photo
Fri 09/25/15 02:08 PM
It's beautiful Rains
I'm with Dats. I'm not kissing your dog.

panchovanilla's photo
Fri 09/25/15 08:57 PM
Miss Rains..
Looking forward to seeing your inner beauty,
put into words.

And I would kiss that loveable Lily.
But then...who would want to kiss me after??ohwell

SitkaRains's photo
Fri 09/25/15 09:01 PM

Miss Rains..
Looking forward to seeing your inner beauty,
put into words.

And I would kiss that loveable Lily.
But then...who would want to kiss me after??ohwell


I will kiss you after if you brush your teeth first.

What many don't know this adorable dog isn't mine anymore she is now bonded with my roommate. She is a miracle dog. She was born with 3 heart chambers instead of 4. We found each other when she had weeks to live. She is now several months later a healthy precious little girl..

Rock's photo
Fri 09/25/15 09:21 PM
Rains, you did quite well.

1Marie63's photo
Fri 09/25/15 09:24 PM
Cute. I also have one of those dogs

chronicliar75's photo
Fri 09/25/15 11:32 PM

I am not sure how many of you know that the one thing, I am so envious of the gift and talent people have with the written word. With the help of a dear friend, Dread.. I have have taken the plunge to attempt
to enter this magical realm.

This is about a special dog. Please critique me so that I can grow.
Thank you all...


Lilly's Limerick
I know and love a Dog named Lilly
She is really quite silly
I will give you the scoop
She will eat others poop
And I know you think this verse quite Dilly



It is short but distinctive.
It is concise but speaks
of kaleidoscope of emotions.
It is short but tells
a long story of lessons.

It's a prose & a poem.
but above all it is what it is,
a form of rebuke.

I will always respect your words Ms. Rains.
Know that I am a loyal fan,
and will always see you as an inspiration.







no photo
Sun 09/27/15 10:10 AM

I am not sure how many of you know that the one thing, I am so envious of the gift and talent people have with the written word. With the help of a dear friend, Dread.. I have have taken the plunge to attempt
to enter this magical realm.

This is about a special dog. Please critique me so that I can grow.
Thank you all...


Lilly's Limerick
I know and love a Dog named Lilly
She is really quite silly
I will give you the scoop
She will eat others poop
And I know you think this verse quite Dilly



Again, great job my friend. Keep writing.

no photo
Sun 09/27/15 04:58 PM

I am not sure how many of you know that the one thing, I am so envious of the gift and talent people have with the written word. With the help of a dear friend, Dread.. I have have taken the plunge to attempt
to enter this magical realm.

This is about a special dog. Please critique me so that I can grow.
Thank you all...


Lilly's Limerick
I know and love a Dog named Lilly
She is really quite silly
I will give you the scoop
She will eat others poop
And I know you think this verse quite Dilly



Thank you, I smiled today when I thought of you. You did great! flowerforyou


tulip2633's photo
Mon 09/28/15 11:31 PM
It's very playful, Sitka! Really enjoyed it!

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