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Topic: rust
m4247 Joined Tue 01/07/14 Posts: 29	Mon 08/04/14 09:48 AM
The reward is covered in rust I searched for love... ..and all I found was lust The life I led was such a waste I ran after dreams... ..I never should have chased The help I pray for never came And though I may feel stupid ... ..still I pray, I pray just the same The powers that be, are all out to lunch They will dine on my hope... ..then wash it down with Hawaiian Punch

m3k4y Joined Tue 07/08/14 Posts: 13122	Mon 08/04/14 09:52 AM
The reward is covered in rust I searched for love... ..and all I found was lust The life I led was such a waste I ran after dreams... ..I never should have chased The help I pray for never came And though I may feel stupid ... ..still I pray, I pray just the same The powers that be, are all out to lunch They will dine on my hope... ..then wash it down with Hawaiian Punch

2KidsMom Joined Tue 09/30/08 Posts: 58206	Mon 08/04/14 11:10 AM
Love the first line

Unknow Joined Sat 03/15/08 Posts: 1972	Mon 08/04/14 05:51 PM
That was a very good write and I agree I like the opening line. Chasing your dreams is never a waste, only giving up on them is

Unknow Joined Sat 03/15/08 Posts: 1972	Mon 08/04/14 05:58 PM
Btw never give up on the powers to be or prayer, sometimes they're answered but you just don't know it

m4247 Joined Tue 01/07/14 Posts: 29	Thu 08/07/14 10:31 AM
Thank You all for your feedback, I love writing my favorite creative outlet :)

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