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Emotions
It is cold darkness rushing towards the shore retreating back to the depths of secrets Blue waters painted the color of night refusing to remain still There is no solace no safe haven no calm serenity when you are lost in a sea of pain |
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Edited by
tommyboy1101
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Sat 08/02/14 01:09 AM
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mig,
Clearly well done! I like the feeling inside of this piece. tommy boy moran / Ireland === |
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I agree with Tommy, well done.
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Thanks tommy and wildflower. Its always nice to that someone understands and appreciates your work
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Roses are red and violets are blue
Sugar is sweet and I want you. |
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Roses are red and violets are blue Sugar is sweet and I want you. I seriously have no idea how to take your response. |
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Wow... Well done. I like it...
Brief but powerful |
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Excellent write....
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Love your work Mig...
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Emotions It is cold darkness rushing towards the shore retreating back to the depths of secrets Blue waters painted the color of night refusing to remain still There is no solace no safe haven no calm serenity when you are lost in a sea of pain NICE |
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Edited by
Dennismiller123
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Fri 08/08/14 04:46 PM
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Y-O-U
To the girl in the corner Who is wearing the blue I'm the guy that you nearly knew Just outside before the queue When you drop your shoe I returned to you And now I am in the club Not far from you Looking and wishing That I was next to you S-T-O-P We gonna stop with this rhyme thing And talk about the real thing For I'm the guy that you nearly knew And I say that ain't nothing new Cause I'm still far away from you From the moment I saw you I thought I wanted to know you In your Versace dress And your Lou Boo Boo You were looking so fine I'm wishing you were mine If I was in your shoe I know what I would do!!! J-U-M-P!!!!! I own the rights to this poem as it was written by me. Copyright 9/8/2014. |
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Roses are red and violets are blue Sugar is sweet and I want you. I seriously have no idea how to take your response. It is the sense of humour from across the water. See new poem and feel free to critique. The poem you wrote, I would like to tweak it for you. I will await your response before I tweak. |
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Roses are red and violets are blue Sugar is sweet and I want you. I seriously have no idea how to take your response. It is the sense of humour from across the water. See new poem and feel free to critique. The poem you wrote, I would like to tweak it for you. I will await your response before I tweak. Ok I get your point but here's the thing, I write not so much for ork to be "perfect" but rather to be flawed as it is more of a picture of the soul. So I ask that you respect my flaws and tweak what my work. As for your poem I rather not critique it. Your words your thoughts your poetry is a reflection of you. I enjoyed reading your work. |
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Edited by
Dennismiller123
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Sat 08/09/14 05:22 AM
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Roses are red and violets are blue Sugar is sweet and I want you. I seriously have no idea how to take your response. It is the sense of humour from across the water. See new poem and feel free to critique. The poem you wrote, I would like to tweak it for you. I will await your response before I tweak. Ok I get your point but here's the thing, I write not so much for ork to be "perfect" but rather to be flawed as it is more of a picture of the soul. So I ask that you respect my flaws and tweak what my work. As for your poem I rather not critique it. Your words your thoughts your poetry is a reflection of you. I enjoyed reading your work. I'm glad you liked it. You sound like a gentleman. Any women in this room? |
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