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Topic: One Slow Night Not to Remember
mig25 Joined Sun 08/10/08 Posts: 1537	Tue 05/06/14 04:23 PM
One Slow Night Not to Remember If I asked you to dull my pain with sweet music I knew could not and would not last longer than tomorrow If I asked you to play a song that had no words or rhythm yet somehow eased my sorrow Would you for one slow night be the quiet that keeps me awake so that my dreams won’t remember being the heart with cupid’s broken arrow

Winlei Joined Sat 01/26/13 Posts: 4048	Tue 05/06/14 04:55 PM
Hi mig

pkh Joined Sat 05/26/07 Posts: 14961	Tue 05/06/14 05:43 PM
Aww so sweet again, beautiful write

laphosh Joined Sun 02/16/14 Posts: 8	Fri 05/09/14 05:51 PM
Good words....ooh

tommyboy1101 Joined Sat 11/24/12 Posts: 1352	Sat 05/10/14 02:23 AM Edited by tommyboy1101 on Sat 05/10/14 02:24 AM
" If I " - this is composed very well and shows true feeling. This is a nice piece. Well written with lines broken where they should be. A meaningful, well written Poem - with feeling. I liked reading it. Thanks, mig25. You've done well here. I agree with ' pkh ' - she say's it all. tommy boy moran / Ireland ===

mig25 Joined Sun 08/10/08 Posts: 1537	Sat 05/10/14 01:28 PM
" If I " - this is composed very well and shows true feeling. This is a nice piece. Well written with lines broken where they should be. A meaningful, well written Poem - with feeling. I liked reading it. Thanks, mig25. You've done well here. I agree with ' pkh ' - she say's it all. tommy boy moran / Ireland === Ok let me say this tommy, I read your work and for you to say this means a lot so thank you. pkh you know I appreciate your kind words and laphosh, winlei, and blondey ... thanks so much

ImagineTruth Joined Fri 08/02/13 Posts: 50	Sat 05/10/14 11:56 PM Edited by ImagineTruth on Sat 05/10/14 11:58 PM
Yes, your line breaks always feel very natural.

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