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Topic: Broken
fifth_eye Joined Wed 04/09/14 Posts: 23	Thu 04/10/14 02:09 PM
We are For the most part Broken and hurt Torn and weather beaten Like the ripped sails of a storm ravaged ship Look at us The whole lot of us Milling around open campfires of despondency Seeking warmth from the cold winds of failed promises Perhaps, just perhaps If we put on facades of smiling faces and speak glowingly of how wonderful we are We just might get the attention of another broken soul To keep us company in a sad, broken world.

rapsscallion Joined Thu 11/22/12 Posts: 355	Fri 04/11/14 12:36 PM
Unfortunately there is a lot of truth in your poem, but there is still hope in the land. Maybe.

mig25 Joined Sun 08/10/08 Posts: 1539	Fri 04/11/14 01:27 PM
We are For the most part Broken and hurt Torn and weather beaten Like the ripped sails of a storm ravaged ship Look at us The whole lot of us Milling around open campfires of despondency Seeking warmth from the cold winds of failed promises Perhaps, just perhaps If we put on facades of smiling faces and speak glowingly of how wonderful we are We just might get the attention of another broken soul To keep us company in a sad, broken world. Wow . . . love it

fifth_eye Joined Wed 04/09/14 Posts: 23	Sat 04/12/14 03:10 AM
We are For the most part Broken and hurt Torn and weather beaten Like the ripped sails of a storm ravaged ship Look at us The whole lot of us Milling around open campfires of despondency Seeking warmth from the cold winds of failed promises Perhaps, just perhaps If we put on facades of smiling faces and speak glowingly of how wonderful we are We just might get the attention of another broken soul To keep us company in a sad, broken world. Wow . . . love it Thank you.

fifth_eye Joined Wed 04/09/14 Posts: 23	Sat 04/12/14 03:12 AM
Unfortunately there is a lot of truth in your poem, but there is still hope in the land. Maybe. Yeah, maybe there is hope.

laulo Joined Sat 03/15/14 Posts: 1	Sat 04/12/14 05:49 AM
We are in a land of possible Life can be smooth, sensible Made out of laughters …irresistible I look as far as I'm able Feel ready to mingle Floating like a bubble Lovely feeling to share, humble Pretty easily realisable And so Affordable Laugh at any obstacle You'll find yourself formidable Happy, unstoppable :) Have a good day :)

fifth_eye Joined Wed 04/09/14 Posts: 23	Sat 04/12/14 08:37 AM
We are in a land of possible Life can be smooth, sensible Made out of laughters …irresistible I look as far as I'm able Feel ready to mingle Floating like a bubble Lovely feeling to share, humble Pretty easily realisable And so Affordable Laugh at any obstacle You'll find yourself formidable Happy, unstoppable :) Have a good day :) Wow! Nice!

teasingbrunette Joined Tue 05/26/09 Posts: 5449	Sun 04/13/14 07:38 AM
fifth_eye....'like'

fifth_eye Joined Wed 04/09/14 Posts: 23	Sun 04/13/14 08:42 AM
fifth_eye....'like' Thank you.

literaryliz Joined Thu 09/26/13 Posts: 26	Sun 04/13/14 09:26 AM
Although your poem is well written and points to a sad truth for some, I prefer to bend, not break!

fifth_eye Joined Wed 04/09/14 Posts: 23	Sun 04/13/14 10:14 AM
Although your poem is well written and points to a sad truth for some, I prefer to bend, not break! Good for you! Have faith and bend towards the light.

Leigh2154 Joined Sun 10/02/11 Posts: 16479	Sun 04/13/14 10:25 AM
Absolutely love this!!...A brilliant depiction of "one" part of the whole....Well done!!

kc0003 Joined Fri 05/11/07 Posts: 26382	Sun 04/13/14 11:12 AM
welcome

fifth_eye Joined Wed 04/09/14 Posts: 23	Sun 04/13/14 11:26 AM
Absolutely love this!!...A brilliant depiction of "one" part of the whole....Well done!! Thank you.

wozntwoz Joined Fri 02/07/14 Posts: 21	Mon 04/14/14 03:18 AM
love this so true was warm by your fire

fifth_eye Joined Wed 04/09/14 Posts: 23	Mon 04/14/14 10:51 AM
love this so true was warm by your fire Glad you like it. Thank you.