what the hell right? ill never know if i dont ask!

Not bad.

One simple improvement would be to make it 2-3 short paragraphs, with an empty line in between.

Like this. Keep the like thoughts contained in each paragraph. For example, your personal character traits, things you think make you an ideal mate could go in the first.

Then mention an interest or two. Your music, etc. Do you have a favorite hiking trail? The right words could attract a lady who doesn't like staying indoors in the summertime either. Or wants to learn to play guitar. You never know.

If you felt like writing a third, mention the type woman you are attracted to. Not blonde and big boobs, but the inner qualities that make you look twice. We all have a type. What's yours? Since you are looking for an LTR (even have wants kids in the stats) this could be the paragraph she sees herself with you at.

Keep it positive, so it will attract positive. Good luck.

Love the piercings :) and Welcome

thank you so much for the advice!!

redid the writing and took your advice and put up some more pictures :D hope that makes it better! and thank you again!

Looks good, nice tat's....love the poochies....not crazy about the nose thing, (I tell my daughter it reminds me of a bull. ...but then again you might be a bull j/k) but good luck to you!!

Nice edits.

I like the "chivalry is alive" line.

Beautiful dogs!

Profile looks pretty good,

Love the Sylvia Ji tattoos