Ok, well, I tried to make it rhyme..
Still unsure if I like it..
..but since it's done..
Meh. What the H, right?

“Doesn’t Live Here Anymore”

The doors are locked, the lights are off
A car pulls up, it’s not so tough
Run to the bedroom, pull all the shades
Close my eyes and think of brighter days
Then there it is, a knock upon my door
“Go away!” Because I want nothing more
My mind is tired and emotions are wore
Your love doesn't live here anymore

The sun goes down, the moon rises up
Just the end of another busy day
Rest in bed as thoughts fail to breathe
Don’t bother calling; I've nothing to say
We’re just like a record, stuck on repeat
Every time I come back you just push me away
I was faithful, you were the whore
All my passion, you found a way to ignore
Now you wonder; why love doesn't live here anymore

Nearing the stages of a deep sleep
There you are; but no longer do I weep
Your love is like the shadow
All it knows is just how to creep
Again I hear, a knock upon my door
Just leave me alone, nothing left to take
Mind is numb, my eyes are sore
Nightmares of pain; such a mistake
Your love doesn’t live here anymore

I could imagine myself saying these words.

Oh my sexy Machug...

:(

I don't really like it either..
..and hey, you never answered my last email.

what did it say??????

Um. >.>

Kinda private dun'cha think?

well shoot.......I was just wondering......lol don't be so serous

Well, wasn't really all that serious..
Just saying..
It'd be here place to say, not mine.

Well, you didn't say anything for one..
..two..
Your on my poem and haven't even commented it. D:

ok HELLO ....... You could make a SONG out of that POEM......... How's that????

Thanks! :D

..but I don't write music. :X

Well I swear that sounds like a RAP song........I LOVE music of all kinds & where do you think
music comes from? Words, stories, fiction & Facts......

Meh.

I need a chorus.
An entourage.
Big booty b*****s.
Pimped out Escalades.
26 inch rims.
Champagne.
Bling.
Celebrity Cameo Appearance.
A DJ.
...and...
A criminal record.
(Or being shot, minimum of three bullet holes)

Heh.

(That's FUNNY!)

Maybe, lol...

...but it's true. xD

your writing is Universal: it speaks to whomever reads it! It inspires, it moves, it invites to explore...it sounds like something familiar!
Here, no critic just taught by the best: English professor Tayo o'lafioye! I got so lucky with his friendship and wisdom.

Your writing, for me, describes that letting go is "tough" ; however its healthy and possible to brake a vicious and unhealthy cycle.

Thanks for sharing.

I have a virtual gift for you: poetryfoundation.org. I've heard of it! When I listen to the commentator on the radio announcing it, I think of you. .

Let it be a wonderful day! Have a wonderful day!

Heh.
I always wanted to try and send my work in to one of those sites..
..but I just never have the cojones..

lol, for the longest I always hoped someone would surprised me and do it for me.. :X

..but lol, I'd probably be all mad at the same time..
You know all while asking.. 'So how'd I do?'

xD

Nice flow,,,I LIKE IT!,,,

Thanks!
Guy with 10,000 bandanas. :D

Hmm.. I wonder why everyone's commenting this one?
I wrote 5..
This one got 18 comments..
To like 1 between the other 4. :O

Well at least you are aware what it takes: ....now, or back then you know what's been missing!
There is a song hope you listen to this one: Dare to live ( vivere.) sang by Laura Pausini and Andrea Bocelli. I just corrected the Singer.
if that doesn't inspire you to. Follow through with your goal: sending your poems or making an inquiry with the editor...I don't know what will!
Now, with a radical and real perspective of the media today: top notch journalists ( and artists) either have twitter, blogs and its amazing how many followers ...well. follow! Choose, plan, choose, have fun and run with it! Ah! Before I forget , I only commented ob this one because I guess it was the first one!