Topic: A recent poem of mine, what do you think?
youngwriter88's photo
Sun 01/08/12 08:31 PM
Winter green
the whitened night
ready to be thankful

for all the angels
spread their gospel
as the wind fixes his stories

through the shaking
roller skating
smelly whole of dopes

as the crowd jumped
out from madness
flying in their church cloaks

shame undo the nightfall
white like your spreading gospel


Ill uproot that dead man hostel
clean him for the grace of
grave talk

black is black
forget a white hall


spend smiles on the best
most wildest intentions
beyond artificial invention
those emotions you were blessed in

Sin_and_Sorrow's photo
Sun 01/08/12 08:34 PM
I like it.

Sounds very religious.
And, as such, I like it.

Hope to see more. :)

no photo
Sun 01/08/12 08:40 PM
Edited by iam4u on Sun 01/08/12 08:41 PM
:wink: drinker Well my youngwriter,,I'd say it was much deeper than I go,,but after four times really trying to get it..
I will say I believe I like it....laugh
ALL WRITES AND POEMS HERE are made for us to read and as they get made within YOU,,the writer,,we love to read your mind,,and their starts..WELCOME and keep them coming,,drinker :banana:

no photo
Sun 01/08/12 08:48 PM
:thumbsup: flowerforyou

mig25's photo
Sun 01/08/12 10:08 PM
I liked this piece, very deep. Good work and welcome