Topic: The Unlucky One
JamieRawxx's photo
Tue 09/28/10 11:17 AM
Edited by JamieRawxx on Tue 09/28/10 11:54 AM
What do you do when there's no where to go
when your life has passed you by and you have nothing to show
there's no place to run and you stand all alone
all your bridges have burnt, the tables have turned
you have faded into the background, your luck has finally ran out
and all you see is their doubt
no more hope or faith, just cruelty and hate, misery and pain
One more needle to end the day, one more line to end the shame
one more hit to fade away
don't even know if i'll return again
don't even care with the words that were said
Just want to forget, forget now and forget the past
forget everything that seems to last
nothing good has come of this, what is left of this relationship
everything is just hell bent, used to be it was heaven sent
now im just relentless, this love turned to resentment
more or less it's just torment
Guess i am the unlucky one, used up abused one
the broken and unglued one

[Unfinished]

burgundybry's photo
Tue 09/28/10 11:22 AM
Wow! Nice write, Jamie! Lots to identify withflowers

Teditis's photo
Tue 09/28/10 11:33 AM
very nice... flowerforyou

it is unfinished... you do know that.
in 2 months you get a blank canvas
a clean slate.

i wonder what pictures you'll paint,
what poems you'll write.

johnnyheartbeep's photo
Tue 09/28/10 02:02 PM
Raw, like the pain it describes.

joejealousy's photo
Tue 09/28/10 02:47 PM
Edited by joejealousy on Tue 09/28/10 03:08 PM
I'm here to say, it'll be ok
it'll be alright, regardless the fights
in lieu, of the lonely nights
its truth, filled with phony lies
eyes filled, with homely cries
the bonds that ties
but, that wells run dry
and that high, this guy
one regret, two sighs
when ya try to deny the lie
and you show strength, defy the guy
defy gravity, cause damn it he
is slandering, now imagine he
magically realizes,the multiple disguises
and he surprises, beats fate, defies it
gives up the drugs just to try it
and comes off some love,kisses and hugs
will you buy it?
does it change whats done?
nah, but your strong, and you already know
ya can't go back.
can ya digg it?

JamieRawxx's photo
Wed 09/29/10 09:37 AM

I'm here to say, it'll be ok
it'll be alright, regardless the fights
in lieu, of the lonely nights
its truth, filled with phony lies
eyes filled, with homely cries
the bonds that ties
but, that wells run dry
and that high, this guy
one regret, two sighs
when ya try to deny the lie
and you show strength, defy the guy
defy gravity, cause damn it he
is slandering, now imagine he
magically realizes,the multiple disguises
and he surprises, beats fate, defies it
gives up the drugs just to try it
and comes off some love,kisses and hugs
will you buy it?
does it change whats done?
nah, but your strong, and you already know
ya can't go back.
can ya digg it?



I really really like this, it's like the other half of the story it's great.