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| Topic: a short poem...dont be too harsh | |
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A shell
This hotel is vacant Letting wanderers check in No one stays long The walls are just too thin Standing alone, disassociated from the town Once beautiful on the outside, Intricate in every detail. Created out of love and pride. Nothing but dirty sheets and Echoes of lost innocence fill the inside. Shes worn and worn out Just a shell. Cigarette burns leave their mark Leaving scars too small to the eye although deep enough for her to feel like trash. |
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Edited by
2KidsMom
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Fri 12/18/09 06:38 AM
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  Welcome. |
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welcome....
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Welcome, I love the message here, nicely conceptualized.
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 Welcome to our sacred forum.Godspeed!Cy
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Sad poem,,
it seems to sum up somebodys memories, who was looking for more. Michael |
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The poem needs work. Not being harsh but giving my opinion.
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Welcome...
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 I look forward to seeing more of your works. |
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wow! welcome,enjoyed the poem
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Thanks for posting. I look forward to seeing more. Welcome
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thanks everyone! :) nice to meet you all
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I can totally picture this. I like it. Great write.
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