*so the last 3 lines I kinda forced a bit, not sure about em and the title I didnt know what to call it... I'm open to suggestions. Please don't be an a$$.* thanks

I’m depressed
Not sure why
Sitting alone
In the dark
I need someone
To hold
Can’t stand
Goin’ to bed
Alone
The pillow
Worn so
Thin
From years
Of squeezing
So tight
There’s nothing
To it now
Why isn’t
She in my arms
Why do I continue
Wishing she was
More times
Than not
When I think
Of her
I’m happy
Floating on
Cloud nine
But, once
In awhile
I feel
Conflicted
Argue with
Myself knowing
The answer
She’s everything
And, the best
I’ll ever
Have.

DY
10-21-08

Dude thats a good write the last lines are fine it's a good title too, whats with the picture somebody beat up on you?

Thanks. lol it would take a few people and or a weapon of some kind to get that effect haha. No it's stage blood from the-haunt. I'm one of the actors there

"But, once
In awhile
I feel
Conflicted
Argue with
Myself knowing
The answer
She’s everything
And, the best
I’ll ever
Have."


Hmmm - More questions with answers are buried in here along with another poem, I think. May just lead to how this one really should end naturally rather than forced. Just a thought.

Great write.

If I were to even change one thing. It would only be one thing. I would change the word I'll to I and the last word from Have to Had.




Nice special effects btw





Edit: I guess that was two things, sorry, lol.

good write the feelings do come through