I would take the part out about how many people you've slept with and kissed, because that's need to know info and ppl browsing don't need to know...that, and the part about the g/f leaving you for another guy because if you aren't bitter then why are you bringing it up?

I think the problem is you're looking at the women as a whole age range. Everyone is an individual and everyone wants something different at any given stage in their life. You just need to find that ONE girl who is compatible with you, but one thing maybe all girls find attractive is confidence (not cockiness, there is a fine line) and you seen really down on yourself about not having your own place and not having alot of money, etc. If thats all they want, then I don't think you should even waste your time with them...Maybe you should try meeting girls in a place where money isn't a factor, like at the library or something simple like that?