Hi all, I'd really love your input on my writing good or bad. This is a poem that I really adore but, feel free to rip it apart if you feel the urge, haha.



Eye’s meet
as lovers meet;
as lips meet together
for the first time.
A choice made
in haste.
A lifetime made in a second
of closed-eyed bliss.
How wonderful
to feel the world rock you to sleep,
or awake.
How perfect to be in his arms;
to feel a caress through a
glass of wine.
To see the reflection
of another’s heart in the
shinny, designer shoes and shirt.
All by chance,
all for the moment,
that the watch stopped
and something magical was woven
into real life.
A love story for the storybooks.
A tale for the children.
For the mothers to gossip
and the Daddy’s to cry.
A little girl becomes a woman;
giving herself completely
to a man.