Phantom_Romance


Phantom_Romance Joined Sun 02/07/10 Posts: 3	Mon 12/30/13 05:32 PM Topic: hi all im Debbie Edited by Phantom_Romance on Mon 12/30/13 05:33 PM
You certainly know what you want. I would just fix the grammar and punctuation. Good luck Debbie.

Phantom_Romance Joined Sun 02/07/10 Posts: 3	Mon 12/30/13 05:26 PM Topic: curious :P
You're profile is certainly up front and to the point. Perhaps edit the "likes to look out for himself" part. This could be construed as you being a selfish lover. Perhaps deterring possible matches. Maybe describe some thing that you are passionate about to let the reader get to know you better.

Phantom_Romance Joined Sun 02/07/10 Posts: 3	Mon 12/30/13 05:21 PM Topic: Rate me?
I personally would take out the first paragraph or rewrite it. I don't think girls fighting over you in high school in relevant. It seems like bragging, and doesn't cast the right tone for an introduction. Also edit out the part about your parents calling girls you dated plain. It makes your parents seem a bit cold and judgmental. Not a very inviting glance into the future if you ever introduce your girlfriend to them.