Topic: ~Just For Today~ | |
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Edited by
ellgee1976
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Thu 02/14/08 07:39 AM
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Just for today,
I wish you happiness, A pep in your step, Many smiles, no less. Just for today, I wish your smile, Big and bright, If only for awhile. Just for today, I wish a shine, In your eyes, No one can define. Just for today, Know that I want, To hold your hand, For you, I'd flaunt. Happy Valentine's Day |
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You put a smile on all of our faces Ellgee u are a VERY special person!!!
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Well I hope you the same
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verry well put ellgee
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Very very nice. (wont be good for comments till after i finish my coffee lol)
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thnx evrryone
lunnie..where's my coffee? lol |
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Awwww... for ME! And you posted it so everyone could see! How sweet! LoL
Very nice, Miss Kansas. I lik-ah ah lut! (= |
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Edited by
ellgee1976
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Thu 02/14/08 08:02 AM
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Awwww... for ME! And you posted it so everyone could see! How sweet! LoL Very nice, Miss Kansas. I lik-ah ah lut! (= lol thanx mr wisconsin, i like you too, uh lawt |
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Ohhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh i really like this one,,, Mmmmmmm very nice |
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Ohhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh i really like this one,,, Mmmmmmm very nice thanks mom, you always make me smile when you comment :D |
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awww that was simply beautiful
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awww that was simply beautiful thankx pkh |
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You have a gift my friend. Poetry just flows from within you. Very sweet and such a beautiful poem my friend. Wuv ya lots!
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Edited by
MsTeddyBear2u
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Thu 02/14/08 12:19 PM
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(((ellgee)))
Hope your day is very peppy! |
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nice one ell put a smile on my face keep it up
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Merci Beaucoup LG. Tres bien ecrit. Je te souhaite pareil.
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Edited by
ZPicante
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Thu 02/14/08 10:47 PM
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Nice. I love the sentiment and the simplicity.
Yet...Something about it grabs me as unintentionally "bitter," for lack of a better word. I get what you're conveying--that these things ("happiness," "smiles," and such) are fleeting and you wish they would last, if "just for today"--but that wording seems to carry the opposite meaning, to me: It comes off as if you *wish* this person would experience happiness *only* for today. Hard to describe, but you see what I mean? On that note, I would suggest that *maybe* adding an "if" before "just for today," each repeating line then would read: "If just for today." This would clarify and soften things a lot, methinks. Not saying you *must* do this, only a suggestion to improve clarity. All that verbosely said, good work. |
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Very nice ellgee
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