Topic: ~Just For Today~
ellgee1976's photo
Thu 02/14/08 07:38 AM
Edited by ellgee1976 on Thu 02/14/08 07:39 AM
Just for today,
I wish you happiness,
A pep in your step,
Many smiles, no less.

Just for today,
I wish your smile,
Big and bright,
If only for awhile.

Just for today,
I wish a shine,
In your eyes,
No one can define.

Just for today,
Know that I want,
To hold your hand,
For you, I'd flaunt.


Happy Valentine's Day

no photo
Thu 02/14/08 07:42 AM
You put a smile on all of our faces Ellgee u are a VERY special person!!!flowerforyou drinker flowerforyou

no photo
Thu 02/14/08 07:43 AM
Well I hope you the sameflowerforyou

sasfire75's photo
Thu 02/14/08 07:49 AM
verry well put ellgee

escapedlunatic's photo
Thu 02/14/08 07:52 AM
Very very nice. (wont be good for comments till after i finish my coffee lol)

ellgee1976's photo
Thu 02/14/08 07:54 AM
thnx evrryone

lunnie..where's my coffee? lol

JaceKnows's photo
Thu 02/14/08 08:00 AM
Awwww... for ME! And you posted it so everyone could see! How sweet! LoL

Very nice, Miss Kansas. I lik-ah ah lut! (=

ellgee1976's photo
Thu 02/14/08 08:01 AM
Edited by ellgee1976 on Thu 02/14/08 08:02 AM

Awwww... for ME! And you posted it so everyone could see! How sweet! LoL

Very nice, Miss Kansas. I lik-ah ah lut! (=


lol thanx mr wisconsin, i like you too, uh lawt

LAMom's photo
Thu 02/14/08 08:16 AM
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Ohhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh i really like this one,,, Mmmmmmm very nice

ellgee1976's photo
Thu 02/14/08 08:34 AM

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Ohhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh i really like this one,,, Mmmmmmm very nice


thanks mom, you always make me smile when you comment :D

pkh's photo
Thu 02/14/08 08:37 AM
awww that was simply beautifulflowerforyou

ellgee1976's photo
Thu 02/14/08 08:53 AM

awww that was simply beautifulflowerforyou


thankx pkh flowerforyou

Goofball73's photo
Thu 02/14/08 11:48 AM
You have a gift my friend. Poetry just flows from within you. Very sweet and such a beautiful poem my friend. Wuv ya lots!:wink:

MsTeddyBear2u's photo
Thu 02/14/08 12:18 PM
Edited by MsTeddyBear2u on Thu 02/14/08 12:19 PM
(((ellgee)))
Hope your day is very peppy!
flowerforyou :heart: flowerforyou

no photo
Thu 02/14/08 08:59 PM
nice one ell put a smile on my face keep it up

karmafury's photo
Thu 02/14/08 09:34 PM
Merci Beaucoup LG. Tres bien ecrit. Je te souhaite pareil.

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ZPicante's photo
Thu 02/14/08 10:46 PM
Edited by ZPicante on Thu 02/14/08 10:47 PM
Nice. I love the sentiment and the simplicity. :smile:

Yet...Something about it grabs me as unintentionally "bitter," for lack of a better word. I get what you're conveying--that these things ("happiness," "smiles," and such) are fleeting and you wish they would last, if "just for today"--but that wording seems to carry the opposite meaning, to me: It comes off as if you *wish* this person would experience happiness *only* for today. Hard to describe, but you see what I mean?

On that note, I would suggest that *maybe* adding an "if" before "just for today," each repeating line then would read: "If just for today." This would clarify and soften things a lot, methinks. Not saying you *must* do this, only a suggestion to improve clarity.

All that verbosely said, good work. :wink:

creativesoul's photo
Fri 02/15/08 02:20 AM
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2Btrue2One's photo
Fri 02/15/08 03:27 AM
Very nice ellgeeflowerforyou