I wrote this about a woman i care deeply for, we both leave for the marines soon. Tell me what u think? too corny?

When I see you my heart skips a beat,
A smile on your face is worth more than the cosmos.
Remember when I said I would sweep u off your feet?
I wish I could come to you in a fleet of limos.

When I see you my heart skips a beat,
My stomach fills with butterflies and my palms get sweaty.
Your love makes me warmer than the summer heat,
By comparision the stars themselve's seem petty

When I see you my heart skips a beat,
You haunt my dreams with whispers of passion.
The bond we have becomes stronger than reinforced concrete,
Promise to remember me when you eat your field ration

When I see you my heart skips a beat,
You're leaving soon into iraqi streets.
While your departure makes me do naught but weep,
I can always remember that for one night you were mine to keep.

It's Absolutly BEAUTIFUL!!!
Good Luck For Both Of You:)

thanks

I think its kinda sweet...in a miltaristic kinda way...

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