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Topic: “The Wall Crumbles”
TxsGal3333 Joined Tue 09/05/06 Posts: 76439	Mon 01/14/08 02:43 PM
“The Wall Crumbles” There was a wall that had been built. Slowly but surely it started to tilt. Inch by inch they chipped at the brick. That had been laid so thick. Within time it started to thin. They started to feel as if they would win. Why in time had it seemed. That it was deemed. It was necessary to build such a wall. That no one could even begin to crawl. Over and see. What life could be. Within these walls it felt. As if no one again could melt. This heart and soon again leave it broken. Not wanting to hear those words spoken. Just words that some have no clue. They should say them only when they are true. But within time there was this one. A heart once broken they have won. So slowly but surely they started to chip. Away at that wall and made ones heart again skip. A beat then two it happen so fast. Wondering will this last. Then they watched the wall. Slowly start to crumble and fall. They stood and looked around. Down it fell to the ground. There they stood and looked at the mound. They realized there heart had been found. K.L.M 1/14/2008

MirrorMirror Joined Fri 10/26/07 Posts: 89680	Mon 01/14/08 02:52 PM
excellent

klugman Joined Mon 03/19/07 Posts: 1776	Mon 01/14/08 02:54 PM
JUST WOW... You are the poetry queen my dear.

lonelyheart36 Joined Sat 01/12/08 Posts: 470	Mon 01/14/08 02:55 PM
“The Wall Crumbles” There was a wall that had been built. Slowly but surely it started to tilt. Inch by inch they chipped at the brick. That had been laid so thick. Within time it started to thin. They started to feel as if they would win. Why in time had it seemed. That it was deemed. It was necessary to build such a wall. That no one could even begin to crawl. Over and see. What life could be. Within these walls it felt. As if no one again could melt. This heart and soon again leave it broken. Not wanting to hear those words spoken. Just words that some have no clue. They should say them only when they are true. But within time there was this one. A heart once broken they have won. So slowly but surely they started to chip. Away at that wall and made ones heart again skip. A beat then two it happen so fast. Wondering will this last. Then they watched the wall. Slowly start to crumble and fall. They stood and looked around. Down it fell to the ground. There they stood and looked at the mound. They realized there heart had been found. K.L.M 1/14/2008 nice!

TxsGal3333 Joined Tue 09/05/06 Posts: 76439	Mon 01/14/08 04:58 PM
MirrorMirror thank you klugman aww thank you for your kind words but I'm far from that so many good ones here lonelyheart36 thank you as well

LAMom Joined Tue 12/12/06 Posts: 26866	Mon 01/14/08 05:58 PM
(((( Puddin Cup ))))) Breaking down the wall is the hardest thing to do,, Yet when it falls this incredible feeling overcomes you and when your heart and soul see that of another,, Ohhhhhhhhhhhhhh WoW,,,

MsTeddyBear2u Joined Fri 04/06/07 Posts: 22031	Mon 01/14/08 07:06 PM
Your on a mighty roll today girl! (((TXS)))

Wolfeyes58 Joined Tue 09/25/07 Posts: 5114	Mon 01/14/08 07:14 PM
Very very good Kristi....sometimes it takes a while for those walls to come down...I know...

TxsGal3333 Joined Tue 09/05/06 Posts: 76439	Tue 01/15/08 05:27 PM
(((( Puddin Cup ))))) Breaking down the wall is the hardest thing to do,, Yet when it falls this incredible feeling overcomes you and when your heart and soul see that of another,, Ohhhhhhhhhhhhhh WoW,,, Ohhh yes girl and we all wait for that one that can make that wall crumble indeed.

Jamie82 Joined Tue 05/08/07 Posts: 14951	Tue 01/15/08 05:30 PM
when someone truly wants something they will knock those walls down great job

robinlynn42 Joined Tue 01/01/08 Posts: 2251	Tue 01/15/08 08:51 PM


TxsGal3333 Joined Tue 09/05/06 Posts: 76439	Wed 01/16/08 12:54 PM
when someone truly wants something they will knock those walls down great job So true or if we find something we really want we will knock them down ourselves robinlynn42 thank you

Noden Joined Mon 06/11/07 Posts: 5050	Wed 01/16/08 01:06 PM
Somehow, someway, I felt this poem was meant for me, I know it wasn't but it felt so close, I took a back, and shedded a tear, cause those walls of mine are slowing falling to the ground, but with someone very dear, your poem has touched me right to the core, again Kristi, your writes I adore

TxsGal3333 Joined Tue 09/05/06 Posts: 76439	Fri 01/18/08 05:29 AM
Somehow, someway, I felt this poem was meant for me, I know it wasn't but it felt so close, I took a back, and shedded a tear, cause those walls of mine are slowing falling to the ground, but with someone very dear, your poem has touched me right to the core, again Kristi, your writes I adore Awwwww but sweet Noden this could be meant for so many including yourself.