Topic: tell me what you think
Buttman's photo
Sat 01/13/24 08:28 PM
and if you would be so kind to tell me what you think of my profile and what I could do different thank you

Mortman's photo
Sun 01/14/24 09:05 AM
Edited by Mortman on Sun 01/14/24 09:10 AM
You've got some good, clear photos and seem like a good-looking guy (welcome to the gun show). It also looks like you don't own a good shirt and your text blurb is a bit of a mess.

The line "I'm just looking for some sparks" is brilliant, and you should put that in your headline (where it currently just says "Hi.." -- so lame). I see our profile web form is a bit misleading, since that text box is above the text blurb section, so in that top box, you need to put your profession, like "Accountant" or "Secret Agent" or whatever you do.

The text blurb is grammatically incorrect:
"if they're open-minded down to try new things experience life exciting are the adventurous"

When it starts with "if" it should have a "then". You don't. If I rewrote it, it would say:
I'm looking for an open-minded lady who is down to try new things, experience life, and whatever comes next.

I see your mind is in the right place, but you seem to have messed up on applying it in your profile.

Lastly, the photos. The default pic is a good shot at half your face and most of one bicep. You need to take a good pic when you look into the lens of the camera. Learn where the lense is on your phone and look at it when snapping the pic. It also wouldn't hurt to smile and wear a nice shirt for this. Maybe you're definitely not a formal shirt guy, so you can ignore that last point. Be yourself.

Anyway, it's pretty clear that you're a kind, fit, good-looking guy, so you should be fine, either way. Most women can read between the lines. Knocking off a few points for the flawed photos, misplaced headline, missing profession, and grammatically incorrect blurb, I rate it 7/10.

Good luck!

Merry's photo
Sun 01/14/24 10:12 AM
Hi :wave::wave:
I agree with Mortman on his commentary. To be frank... Your username somewhat killed your profile for you. If that's your preference perhaps put it into your profile, but if one were to message you how would they address you? It makes it tricky and not so flattering. I initially looked at your profile, but didn't really know what to say because first impressions do count.

Good luck! I hope you find what you are looking for
:sunflower::bouquet: