Topic: The Moon of My Grave
Murc's photo
Tue 01/01/08 07:54 AM
Edited by Murc on Tue 01/01/08 08:28 AM
This is my 1st poem in English as I learned the language two years ago

=-=-=-=-=- The Moon of My Grave -=-=-=-=-=


where are you
my dark moon

did your color drown
in the lake of the sky

or did your lips get lost
at my wailing

oh, my moon,

my outcry
didn't earn anything
but agony and
my breath is choaked
by moaning

the bridle of my burried surrows
chafes to return

ashes to ashes

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hope you liked it flowerforyou

Hassan

TxsGal3333's photo
Tue 01/01/08 08:17 AM
Very goodflowerforyou

Murc's photo
Tue 01/01/08 08:29 AM
thank you flowerforyou

Noden's photo
Tue 01/01/08 08:49 AM
mmmm, niceflowerforyou smokin

MsTeddyBear2u's photo
Tue 01/01/08 12:34 PM
drinker Good!!!

LAMom's photo
Tue 01/01/08 12:37 PM
flowerforyou

Murc's photo
Tue 01/01/08 06:30 PM
Noden, MsTeddyBear2u & LAMom

Thank you flowerforyou

Noden's photo
Tue 01/01/08 06:49 PM
Your welcomeflowerforyou

songstress1's photo
Tue 01/01/08 06:52 PM
flowerforyou flowerforyou nice

Murc's photo
Tue 01/01/08 10:16 PM
Edited by Murc on Tue 01/01/08 10:16 PM
Thank You flowerforyou flowerforyou

popcornncoke's photo
Tue 01/01/08 10:18 PM
very nice.

Jess642's photo
Tue 01/01/08 11:12 PM
Wow, that is exceptional!

Almost reminiscent of Persian poetry... beautiful, thankyou.flowerforyou

Murc's photo
Wed 01/02/08 10:02 PM
Thank you popcornncoke flowerforyou

Murc's photo
Wed 01/02/08 10:05 PM
Edited by Murc on Wed 01/02/08 10:06 PM
Thank you Jess642 flowerforyou

but I don't think I'm close to that level yet..

something was missing in it comparing to the Arabic version but can't recognize it ohwell

thank you again for the wonderful comment