New rock song I wrote...

DISCLAIMER:
(not about anyone, just a song)ENJOY!

FREE ME
by Twilight (12-2007)

I bet you thought you fell in love
I bet you thought I felt the same...
But youre just a man
Quit grabbin' on my hand
Cuz love is not a f*ckin' game...


I bet you thought I had a good time
I bet you loved to take me out...
But youre just a man
Quit grabbin' on my hand
Cuz you dont know what Im all about...

(Chorus)*screamed*

FREE ME!
FREE YOU!
CUZ THIS LOVE WILL NEVER BE!

FREE ME!
FREE YOU!
CUZ THIS LOVE WILL NEVER BE......FREE.


I bet you thought I'd meet your mom
I bet you thought I'd love your cat...
But youre just a man
and I am just a girl
and feelings do get hurt like that...

(Chorus)
FREE ME!
FREE YOU!
CUZ THIS LOVE WILL NEVER BE!

FREE ME!
FREE YOU!
CUZ THIS LOVE WILL NEVER BE........FREE!!!

*(This next part is sung/spoken, and screamed when in CAPS)

Like sands through an hour glass...
ripples in time...
You said its romance...
I said "YOU LIE!"

Like the rythem of a wild drum...
the beat of a heart...
You wrap your arms around me...
"DON'T EVEN START!"

Like the cobwebs of life...
needles and thread...
You kiss my lips...
"I AM DEAD!"

(Chorus)
FREE ME!
FREE YOU!
CUZ THIS LOVE WILL NEVER BE!

FREE ME!
FREE YOU!
CUZ THIS LOVE WILL NEVER BE!


FREE ME! (FREE ME)
FREE YOU! (FREE YOU)
CUZ THIS LOVE WILL NEVER BE!

FREE ME! (FREE ME)
FREE YOU! (FREE YOU)
CUZ THIS LOVE WILL NEVER BE....

FREE!

wow, thats really actually good! you should, like be a rock star!

thats good, record it and sell it as a demo, that is if u have a band lol, im an idot, shoulda asked that first but o well

good sh1t

Good flow I guess, but generic as hell. Instead of thinking what sounds cool, seems like you need to concentrate more on how the tempo flows with your soul and feeling. I find writing to be the hardest simple task. That is why I love it so much. To express the unsaid and see the lyrical overtones come to life is a feeling like no other. Your song is OK at best.

Sounds like somebody needs a hug, and told that she's pretty.

I wish I could put the music on here somehow. Reading the words make it pretty flat.

Im not in a band right now....just me, my voice, and my guitar.