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Hi, I’m not very good at selling myself and can sometimes go off on a tangent. Am I being too wordy? I really want to find my future partner and quiet proactive in searching. I’m getting responses and matches just not what I’m targeting. E.g. guys in their 20’s and 30’s & 60+ that tells me they are not reading my profile. I’ve applied the age and location filter so that narrows down the emails, but the matches are purely visual and that’s not working for me. Thanks for your time, Natasha
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Hi Natasha
 What a great profile but I think it's just a tad too long. It would be even better if you could condense it as some guys don't have the attention span to keep reading  . Perhaps add a few more pics too. Wishing you success with your search. |
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I like it and yes more pics,if you paragraph it the text will be better taken in, good luck
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Hi, I’m not very good at selling myself and can sometimes go off on a tangent. Am I being too wordy? I really want to find my future partner and quiet proactive in searching. I’m getting responses and matches just not what I’m targeting. E.g. guys in their 20’s and 30’s & 60+ that tells me they are not reading my profile. I’ve applied the age and location filter so that narrows down the emails, but the matches are purely visual and that’s not working for me. Thanks for your time, Natasha I know I'm not who you're looking for, but I found one more reason to consider moving to London.  I don't think it's too long, as the right man will be the type that actually takes time to read what you have to say, not one that can't pay attention long enough to get to know you. |
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It is good, but...
Paragraphs!!! Paragraphs, paragraphs!!! I had to force myself to read it, only because I wanted to help and rate it. Normally I'm gone when presented with an unreadable block of text. You seem an intelligent woman, so you should get this. Also, delete the section at the end from "small talk....you approached me." That whole lot. It's unnecessary and could repel a good man who had been interested right up to that point. If you do that AND create clear paragraphs it is a good profile, pleasant and easy to read and very positive, which is a rarity. I think it'll attract quality guys, and cos of what is is it will automatically repel the losers. That's why you can remove that section, it isn't needed. You still may get the occasional a-hole, but that's part of the show. |
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Thank you all so far, I've made a few adaptions already based on your advice and I'll check back later when I have more time.
Happy searching Natasha |
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