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Topic: Witness
someguy1313 Joined Wed 11/14/07 Posts: 754	Tue 11/27/07 06:16 AM
Witness When I empty my eyes For you to draw, Through my pupils you See my mind raw-- As it sits in my head, Day after day, Rolling and twisting With its strange play. The scenes crawl in, The dreams spin out, And in between I With my curses and shouts. So what do you see there, Naked and pained, That makes you draw me So known, yet so strange? An eternal Sadness::::::

peachiegirl28 Joined Sun 09/16/07 Posts: 19292	Tue 11/27/07 06:17 AM


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blonderockermom Joined Wed 08/08/07 Posts: 6886	Tue 11/27/07 06:21 AM
Soooo sad...

neveragain Joined Mon 11/19/07 Posts: 99	Tue 11/27/07 07:12 AM
you finally posted one.... I thought you were to nervous?

someguy1313 Joined Wed 11/14/07 Posts: 754	Tue 11/27/07 07:13 AM
I am... just thought I would put one out there and see what people thought

neveragain Joined Mon 11/19/07 Posts: 99	Tue 11/27/07 07:16 AM Edited by neveragain on Tue 11/27/07 07:18 AM
Well I think its wonderful and you have much better ones. I know you will touch people keep it up.

pkd1220 Joined Thu 05/24/07 Posts: 8318	Tue 11/27/07 07:50 AM
Sad and powerful. Great writing.

TxsGal3333 Joined Tue 09/05/06 Posts: 76412	Tue 11/27/07 08:30 AM
((((((((Someguy1313))))))) hugs to you may the pain go away and you find those dreams to stay within. Very good and welcome to the site hope to see more

someguy1313 Joined Wed 11/14/07 Posts: 754	Tue 11/27/07 10:06 AM
thank you you will

neveragain Joined Mon 11/19/07 Posts: 99	Fri 11/30/07 06:58 AM
Sad and powerful. Great writing. yep

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