What's good about my profile? What needs improvement? I will be using your input to update this profile as well as my profile on another site. All constructive criticism is welcomed!

Hi Josh
To be honest I got bored reading it and stopped after a few lines. But that's just me.
However you are quite handsome and you seem sweet so good luck.

Okay, well, getting bored reading it doesn't sound like a good thing! lol

What do I need to do to prevent that? Add a dragon? A lightsaber duel? I'm trying to attract women, not put them to sleep lol.

I'm sure some people would like it the way it is. Like I said, that's just me.
I'm not very good at the dating thing myself but I just gave you my opinion.
I wish you well sweet guy.

Fair enough, I can respect that.

Thanks.

Fair enough, I can respect that.

Thanks.

Hi Josh,
I think your profile is TMI (too much info) and you should remember KISS (keep it simple sweetie). The other elements of your profile you can share while getting to know someone your interested in. These are just my opinion as well. Good luck in your search!

Any suggestions on what I should cut and what I should keep?

These are my suggestions only (others are welcomed). Keep your interests listed (ones that you are passionate about), describe yourself, share what your looking for on this site and hoping to gain(whether a friendship, relationship or just casual dating, etc). Make it clear so you don't play games with people's mind and feelings. People do take time to invest in relationships so you should take that into consideration. But most importantly, the profile should be you! But not in a 200 word essay. Everything else should fall into place. It just takes a little time. Hope this helps a little. BTW, Your profile is better than the males that have theirs empty and unanswered.
Have a great evening!

Thanks for the input!

I would cut most of paragraph 3 and all of paragraph 4.....
It is way to serious and matter of fact.....
tell a funny story about something in your life.....
lighten it up.....long is okay as long as it is funny and gives a hint of intrigue.....
Good luck.....