I trace the light across the moonlit midnight parchment,
Towards the origin of this unique placement,
Faded farewells kiss the reflections in the river,
Fleeting memories of a world far and away from here.

Tripping on foggy misgivings,
Slipping on choppy longings.

I desire the space between these placid prisms,
Of time and place just beyond the putrid prison,
Trivializing the simple selective section,
Created inside a selfish idealist pride.

Tripping on foggy misgivings,
Slipping on choppy longings.

I criss-cross my fingers numbly,
Clearing this miniature memory,
A Serpent’s tongue veiled in a twisted service,
Tip-toeing along this scenic sideway street.

Tripping on foggy misgivings,
Slipping on choppy longings.

Can't help but wonder why anyone would consider realistic pride selfish when it is one of the few things left in life that holds real value...Super write Fear!

"Pride" is the word there; although, arguably ideals are not much better than selfish perfection. It was more directed at personal views of perfection, or viewing oneself as perfect. It directly plays into the lines that lead into it, each section of four lines is playing through a particular moment...In order; dreams, reality, fantasy.

I'm glad you enjoyed as always, much appreciated to both of you.

For me false pride is the culprit...Idealist pride can be a very good thing...Truth is I "needed" to read it the way I did and I love it because I could...

this place is awash with so much talent. another amazing post

I like it !


KiK

love it love it love it

It reads like a song F&L

as soon as read the line about the pace between placid prisms I saw two images. one was the album art on Pink Floyd's Dark Side of The Moon

and the other a memory of the light refracting and dancing on the walls in my parents house, as it fell on my grandma's candleststicks with the big circles of crytals prisms. the spaces were the lace on tablecloth where they sat on the table

or a collection of large toothy felines :)

Our view's of pride are different is all. I'm glad you enjoyed it the way that you read it, that is what it is after all, just interpretation.

I was actually thinking of Floyd when I wrote that line, haha. Thank you again, everyone, it is much appreciated and I am glad that you could take something away from this on a personal level.

awesome

Awesome write Fear i loved it.

these two line give me nightmarish vision

double post | my chance to give you...

I really like this

Deep

Wow, thank you everyone. I am happy you all enjoyed this.

nice, fear.

Due to reconsideration I modified that line...The tempo didn't match what I intended in the first place so it was inevitably going to happen either way.

"Trivializing the simple selective section,
Created inside a self-centered unjust idealism."

Thanks everyone for your input and compliments, they are much appreciated as always.