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Topic: tell what you think
JustANormalPerson Joined Thu 01/03/13 Posts: 227	Wed 01/30/13 12:48 AM
I was just sitting there Minding my business When out of the blue She got my attetion She didnt do nothing Or spoke any word She just looked at the sky And glowed like the moon So i tried to remember How to speak once again But to no avail I fell on my head When i finally got up She was gone once again I cant wait Till this dream comes again.

AthenaRose2 Joined Fri 11/09/12 Posts: 6972	Wed 01/30/13 02:59 AM
ouch! okay, so maybe we won't be fast enough to catch you if you fall.. but on your head... man, that's really gotta ache..

tayah12 Joined Tue 05/22/12 Posts: 134	Wed 01/30/13 09:36 AM
Ooh I love it! Its got a Tim Burton kind of vibe.

Teditis Joined Sun 03/07/10 Posts: 3597	Wed 01/30/13 09:44 AM
I like this. Do you see the difference between your dreams/expectaions and her realness? Dream all you want... but she ain't the one for you. And you already know that. Lovely.

Givemyheart2U Joined Sun 05/25/08 Posts: 56	Wed 01/30/13 10:08 AM
Good write! We are all dreamers in one way or another; it's just a way of wishing for things that would never happen but wish they were real!!

JustANormalPerson Joined Thu 01/03/13 Posts: 227	Wed 01/30/13 11:57 AM
Ive been trying to get my poems to sound like stories so i gave this one a go. Tim Burton is actually one of my many inspirations. I hope to be able to write many things for you all to just enjoy. Until next time ill just rant some more

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