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Topic: your thoughts
Queene123 Joined Tue 06/26/07 Posts: 17056	Sun 07/29/12 05:01 PM
your thoughts of owning the world seem to be so lost as wondering where your thoughts and feelings shall be next as the rain falls your tears come to a hault wonder who can trust the world as the goverment that we tend to know is greedy, for money at hand is total loss as the sun shall shine with a better day than the past behind

preachergirl Joined Thu 07/26/12 Posts: 38	Sun 07/29/12 07:30 PM
your poetry lets me think i like

tazzops Joined Sat 12/20/08 Posts: 33333	Mon 07/30/12 07:34 AM


ChristTrueServant7 Joined Sat 07/28/12 Posts: 15	Mon 07/30/12 11:09 AM
Well thought of could, it could use a few breaks or periods though, so the reader can take each line in, just as you intended. Good job and keep writing!

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