I knew that you loved me
I could see it in your smile
in the winks that you gave me
in the way you hugged my child

Hours spent together
Effortless and pure
Jumbled, happy memories
of a time before her

I never thought to mention
How much I loved you too
We both left those words unspoken
For it was enough to just be me and you

I guess maybe it's my fault
I knew she loved you too
I guess maybe it's your fault
For not hearing my silent 'I love you'
I guess maybe it's our fault
For losing me and you

As the tears start to roll
The memory of your smile melts from my view
Replaced by things unsaid
and chances that I blew
I hate that it's my fault
But I now know that it's true
Because all that time together
I honestly thought that you knew.

heartfelt

I'm not much for poetry, but that was pretty good.

Very good. Each time you read it. There is something more to it.

Thanks, everyone! I normally stick to short stories and what not, but decided to take a crack at writing a poem for the first time since junior English class. Glad you liked it!

Very nice write Shannon....and in matters of the heart, it always takes two...do not be too hard on yourself...

To point out how beautifully crafted this piece is is to undermine its starling originality. You did a good job, Shannon. If you don't mind, I'd like to make a few comments on the poem. First, the poem begins with rhyme until in line 6. I think that line is better discarded. it'll be apt if you keep it and and concise. Then from line 6, where the poem drags, up to line 13 you seem to have crumpled it all up by creating a long line without rhyme. Also in line 14 I think the 'I guess maybe it's your fault' should read instead: I guess it's your fault, to avoid the tautology of 'maybe' and 'guess', while line 17 should rather read: my silence unheard, still 'I love you'. On the whole, I believe if reworked, this lovely love poem might win a prize. I salute your courage, Shannon. Keep writing.

To point out how beautifully crafted this piece is is to undermine its starling originality. You did a good job, Shannon. If you don't mind, I'd like to make a few comments on the poem. First, the poem begins with rhyme until in line 6. I think that line is better discarded. it'll be apt if you keep it and and concise. Then from line 6, where the poem drags, up to line 13 you seem to have crumpled it all up by creating a long line without rhyme. Also in line 14 I think the 'I guess maybe it's your fault' should read instead: I guess it's your fault, to avoid the tautology of 'maybe' and 'guess', while line 17 should rather read: my silence unheard, still 'I love you'. On the whole, I believe if reworked, this lovely love poem might win a prize. I salute your courage, Shannon. Keep writing.