thank you for taking the time

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Just another 32 feet per second and 20 feet away,,,as I see its mind,,
closing in to one inch from my eye...as it turns,,to be in its blackend nothingness once more,,until,,YOU wake it!!!
Nice read man,,

thank you my friend...

I love a lot about this Kev. I love the concept and there are some yummy pieces of writing. I am always a fan!

Because you asked, I will put on my critical thinking cap ...

Part of me loves the narrative but part of me wanted it to feel more like the fall ... more staccato ... more fragmented ... telling me less and allowing me fill in the blanks. In free fall, adrenaline surging, the surroundings a blur ... thoughts would come out in bites ... in pictures ... snippets ...



Thirty through thirty seven
Please forgive me
I wasn't thinking
I'm so sorry


That makes me wonder what he needs forgiveness for (the suicide or something that led up to it) ... wasn't thinking? so sorry? something he did, something he didn't do ... who was he speaking to? parent, family, wife, child ... many places of interpretation that allow the reader to participate.

Art is a conversation between the artist and the viewer through the medium of a poem or a painting or a dance...

I love what you do and the way your words always draw me in.

thank you for the time and the in-put. as i have told you, i wasnt sure where it was going to end up, but as i was writing this it took on its own life. (so to speek)

i was going to make the ending more frantic and more ummmmm, more frenzied, but because of the way it started, i thought it may be too much of a contrast.

you have given me some food for thought and i appreciate that more than you know. thank you again.