Topic: Goodbye
FearandLoathing's photo
Thu 12/17/09 02:06 PM
Am I the one, your only one?
Taken by the wrist, and sharpened tips.
Can I be your saviour, knight in shining armor?
Another obsession that I watched until dawn.
Can I take you out, enjoy another 'night on the town'?
As if I'm cutting over and over again and again.
Maybe I like the pain, perhaps I enjoy the shame?
I just can't stop these feelings that are pent up.
Probably is the hate, don't you think?
I just wish I had an answer to this riddle.
Do you think I belong here, think I think it is fair?
You stole my pride and left me here, here I lie.
Feel better now, now that you have knocked me down?
Slip the slippers on for the nightly dinner of downers.
Should I mix this concoction of Molotov cocktails?
Slide into sleep, another comatose dream to repeat.
Maybe I am a lost cause, maybe you had the right thought?
Could it be, am I just that lost that I can't see?
The road is starting to blur, the lines looking fuzzy and curved.
I think this is the end, and I won't be back again.
Goodbye...

kkoldazice's photo
Thu 12/17/09 02:09 PM
:thumbsup:

no photo
Thu 12/17/09 02:13 PM
I like it.drinker

no photo
Thu 12/17/09 03:40 PM
Deeply felt-to the bone...

SunnyMcleod's photo
Thu 12/17/09 03:44 PM
You my friend, are amazing. I love this one. Sht I gotta start writing again! laugh
Keep at that Mr.Fear, keep at it.

no photo
Thu 12/17/09 06:47 PM
Cheers.
Great imagery.

FearandLoathing's photo
Thu 12/17/09 10:05 PM
Cheers everyone!drinker drinker

kc0003's photo
Fri 12/18/09 05:35 AM
drinker

no photo
Fri 12/18/09 08:58 AM
drinker drinker drinker flowers

FearandLoathing's photo
Fri 12/18/09 09:26 AM
Thanks! After reading it I'm going to transition it into a lyric, I think.smokin

Holly4459's photo
Fri 12/18/09 09:27 AM
:cry: brokenheart :cry:

BonnyMiss's photo
Fri 12/18/09 09:36 AM

Am I the one, your only one?
Taken by the wrist, and sharpened tips.
Can I be your saviour, knight in shining armor?
Another obsession that I watched until dawn.
Can I take you out, enjoy another 'night on the town'?
As if I'm cutting over and over again and again.
Maybe I like the pain, perhaps I enjoy the shame?
I just can't stop these feelings that are pent up.
Probably is the hate, don't you think?
I just wish I had an answer to this riddle.
Do you think I belong here, think I think it is fair?
You stole my pride and left me here, here I lie.
Feel better now, now that you have knocked me down?
Slip the slippers on for the nightly dinner of downers.
Should I mix this concoction of Molotov cocktails?
Slide into sleep, another comatose dream to repeat.
Maybe I am a lost cause, maybe you had the right thought?
Could it be, am I just that lost that I can't see?
The road is starting to blur, the lines looking fuzzy and curved.
I think this is the end, and I won't be back again.
Goodbye...


A very good write, you have taken a subject that for many is shrouded in shame and mystery and addressed it in a positive way.

FearandLoathing's photo
Fri 12/18/09 06:03 PM
Thanks! Going to keep the running theme when I turn it into a lyric.smokin

no photo
Fri 12/18/09 06:49 PM

Thanks! Going to keep the running theme when I turn it into a lyric.smokin


:thumbsup:

HOTNINA's photo
Fri 12/18/09 06:51 PM
awesome..loved it..

MirrorMirror's photo
Fri 12/18/09 07:08 PM

Am I the one, your only one?
Taken by the wrist, and sharpened tips.
Can I be your saviour, knight in shining armor?
Another obsession that I watched until dawn.
Can I take you out, enjoy another 'night on the town'?
As if I'm cutting over and over again and again.
Maybe I like the pain, perhaps I enjoy the shame?
I just can't stop these feelings that are pent up.
Probably is the hate, don't you think?
I just wish I had an answer to this riddle.
Do you think I belong here, think I think it is fair?
You stole my pride and left me here, here I lie.
Feel better now, now that you have knocked me down?
Slip the slippers on for the nightly dinner of downers.
Should I mix this concoction of Molotov cocktails?
Slide into sleep, another comatose dream to repeat.
Maybe I am a lost cause, maybe you had the right thought?
Could it be, am I just that lost that I can't see?
The road is starting to blur, the lines looking fuzzy and curved.
I think this is the end, and I won't be back again.
Goodbye...




:thumbsup: nice:thumbsup: