"To the MOON!"
.
"Yes to the moon."
.
"I barely blinked?"
.
"Well im fast"
I smiled and winked.
"Now gather round and listen close,
i'll only say it once
i don't like to boast."
"Now i flew so high
i flew so fast
i was flying faster than shooting-star's!"
.
"SHOOTING-STAR'S?"
"In out-of-SPACE!"
.
"Yes shooting-star's."
.
"But how could you BREATH!"
.
"I held my breath."
.
"For all that TIME!"
"I barely belive?"
.
"Well i reached the moon."
.
"And what did you SEE!"
.
"I met a man."
.
"A man on the MOON!"
"But what does he EAT?"
.
"Why custard of course
cheese give's him bad-dream's."
.
"CUSTARD not CHEESE?"
"Bad-dreams on the MOON!"
"But were does he SLEEP?"
.
"He lay's in a hammock,
he hang's it from hook's."
.
"He lay's in a HAMMOCK?"
"And he has hand's that are HOOK'S!"
.
"What?,hand's that are hook's?"
.
"He's there to write BOOK'S!"
"With hand's that are hooks
AND he lay's in a hammock
BAD-DREAM'S on the moon
and he EAT'S custard not cheese
as it give's him BAD-dream's?"
"I barely BELIVE!"
.
"I sigh and i smile
and look at the moon
"I can see him from here
the man in the moon,
i took him a gift
i gave him a spoon!"
"I told you i did
ive been to the MOON!"
.
"You took him a spoon?"
"Take me to the MOON!"
.
"To the moon?"
.
"YES!!"
"To the moon!"
"I WANT TO GO TO THE MOON!!"
.
"Well keep-hold of your hat
as we're gunna fly FAST!"
"Faster than star's"
"fAster than car's"
"faSter than plan's"
"fasTer than train's"
"fastEr than parrot's"
"fasteR than word's"...
.
"WAIT!"
"Faster than a PARROT!"
"Is the man on the moon a PIRATE!"
"He does have hand's that are hook's
and he's there to write book's
and he lay's in hammock
and you took him a spoon?"
"Mabey he's buried some GOLD!"
.
"Gold on the moon?"
"He's useing my spoon to dig on the moon?"
"You must be MAD!"

ok, that's worse...the little arrow thing-ies are very distracting

i see what you were trying to do but, that did not work...sorry i thought it was ok the other way...maybe you could just leave the spaces and trust that the reader can figure it out...

.
cheers!
something has to be there or it just blocks up?
changed it tho,hope its ok!

here you go....just thought i might help...



"To the MOON!"

"Yes to the moon."

"I barely blinked?"

"Well im fast"
I smiled and winked.
"Now gather round and listen close,
i'll only say it once
i don't like to boast."
"Now i flew so high
i flew so fast
i was flying faster than shooting-star's!"

"SHOOTING-STAR'S?"
"In out-of-SPACE!"

"Yes shooting-star's."

"But how could you BREATH!"

"I held my breath."

"For all that TIME!"
"I barely belive?"

"Well i reached the moon."

"And what did you SEE!"

"I met a man."

"A man on the MOON!"
"But what does he EAT?"

"Why custard of course
cheese give's him bad-dream's."

"CUSTARD not CHEESE?"
"Bad-dreams on the MOON!"
"But were does he SLEEP?"

"He lay's in a hammock,
he hang's it from hook's."

"He lay's in a HAMMOCK?"
"And he has hand's that are HOOK'S!"

"What?,hand's that are hook's?"

"He's there to write BOOK'S!"
"With hand's that are hooks
AND he lay's in a hammock
BAD-DREAM'S on the moon
and he EAT'S custard not cheese
as it give's him BAD-dream's?"
"I barely BELIVE!"

"I sigh and i smile
and look at the moon
"I can see him from here
the man in the moon,
i took him a gift
i gave him a spoon!"
"I told you i did
ive been to the MOON!"

"You took him a spoon?"
"Take me to the MOON!"

"To the moon?"

"YES!!"
"To the moon!"
"I WANT TO GO TO THE MOON!!"

"Well keep-hold of your hat
as we're gunna fly FAST!"
"Faster than star's"
"fAster than car's"
"faSter than plan's"
"fasTer than train's"
"fastEr than parrot's"
"fasteR than word's"...

"WAIT!"
"Faster than a PARROT!"
"Is the man on the moon a PIRATE!"
"He does have hand's that are hook's
and he's there to write book's
and he lay's in hammock
and you took him a spoon?"
"Mabey he's buried some GOLD!"

"Gold on the moon?"
"He's useing my spoon to dig on the moon?"
"You must be MAD!"


Edited by EkkoLost on Mon 11/02/09 02:26 AM

Haha!
now it gets read twice!
thats what i like to hear!
GREEDY!

oh crap!...sorry

enjoyed it Gidd

Nice one!
im a 22yr old boy!

Good one Ekko...

Cheers MzEm you X,ey beast you!

I really enjoyed it it makes me want to read it to my children

Cheers cheeks! x

a fun write!!!

Didn't think it could get better but here it is...

ha,i just love the moon!