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Topic: Venom
tanyaann Joined Mon 12/03/07 Posts: 32220	Tue 06/09/09 08:45 AM
So now the venom spills out The hateful words replace the sweet nothings No longer whispered in the ear But shouted and screamed. That fine line has been crossed All that felt special and real Feels raw and disgusting. Those words that caused chills and tingles Now causes stomach upset and rage As the red and black of the hurt Filters over our eyes. From day to night this relationship Went from 0 to 60 All over a few words. Tanya 6/9/2009

AngelLight Joined Sat 04/12/08 Posts: 4817	Tue 06/09/09 08:53 AM
So now the venom spills out The hateful words replace the sweet nothings No longer whispered in the ear But shouted and screamed. That fine line has been crossed All that felt special and real Feels raw and disgusting. Those words that caused chills and tingles Now causes stomach upset and rage As the red and black of the hurt Filters over our eyes. From day to night this relationship Went from 0 to 60 All over a few words. Tanya 6/9/2009 I'm sorry (((baby)))

MzEm Joined Wed 03/25/09 Posts: 1558	Tue 06/09/09 09:06 AM
Very well done Tanyaann

Lilypetal Joined Wed 02/25/09 Posts: 4052	Tue 06/09/09 09:11 AM
Lovely Tanya

tanyaann Joined Mon 12/03/07 Posts: 32220	Tue 06/09/09 10:41 AM
So now the venom spills out The hateful words replace the sweet nothings No longer whispered in the ear But shouted and screamed. That fine line has been crossed All that felt special and real Feels raw and disgusting. Those words that caused chills and tingles Now causes stomach upset and rage As the red and black of the hurt Filters over our eyes. From day to night this relationship Went from 0 to 60 All over a few words. Tanya 6/9/2009 I'm sorry (((baby))) No I sorries... just reflecting! It's all good!

tanyaann Joined Mon 12/03/07 Posts: 32220	Tue 06/09/09 10:41 AM
MzEm Lily

nvkikigirl Joined Thu 03/05/09 Posts: 3942	Tue 06/09/09 10:27 PM
nice write!!!

tanyaann Joined Mon 12/03/07 Posts: 32220	Wed 06/10/09 05:54 AM
nice write!!! Thank you!

2KidsMom Joined Tue 09/30/08 Posts: 58206	Wed 06/10/09 06:20 AM
very nice write

tanyaann Joined Mon 12/03/07 Posts: 32220	Wed 06/10/09 06:21 AM
very nice write Thank you!

frankfk Joined Sun 09/24/06 Posts: 5684	Wed 06/10/09 07:48 AM
Tanya So now the venom spills out The hateful words replace the sweet nothings No longer whispered in the ear But shouted and screamed. That fine line has been crossed All that felt special and real Feels raw and disgusting. Those words that caused chills and tingles Now causes stomach upset and rage As the red and black of the hurt Filters over our eyes. From day to night this relationship Went from 0 to 60 All over a few words. Tanya 6/9/2009

tanyaann Joined Mon 12/03/07 Posts: 32220	Wed 06/10/09 07:58 AM
(((frank))) Thank you for reading!

Differentkindofwench Joined Sat 04/07/07 Posts: 5960	Wed 06/10/09 10:57 AM
Well done!

tanyaann Joined Mon 12/03/07 Posts: 32220	Wed 06/10/09 10:57 AM
Well done! bows Thank you!

Differentkindofwench Joined Sat 04/07/07 Posts: 5960	Wed 06/10/09 11:00 AM
What, no curtsy?

tanyaann Joined Mon 12/03/07 Posts: 32220	Wed 06/10/09 11:00 AM
What, no curtsy? I wanted to show the cleavage today!

d4tc Joined Tue 04/15/08 Posts: 2754	Wed 06/10/09 11:51 AM
Wicked Cool!

tanyaann Joined Mon 12/03/07 Posts: 32220	Wed 06/10/09 11:54 AM
Wicked Cool! Thanks! I am glad that you liked it!

iam4u Joined Fri 10/13/06 Posts: 30096	Wed 06/10/09 12:06 PM
So now the venom spills out The hateful words replace the sweet nothings No longer whispered in the ear But shouted and screamed. That fine line has been crossed All that felt special and real Feels raw and disgusting. Those words that caused chills and tingles Now causes stomach upset and rage As the red and black of the hurt Filters over our eyes. From day to night this relationship Went from 0 to 60 All over a few words. Many times words so sweet torn to a mind feeled with heat. Anger and rage blast out of no where. Leaving you wishing they were kept in a cage,wink. Glad to read you again, and wish I had the time to comment to everyones poem...Keep on writting girl,wink.. Tanya 6/9/2009

tanyaann Joined Mon 12/03/07 Posts: 32220	Wed 06/10/09 07:12 PM
Hey T! Glad to have you read and comment!