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Topic: Hiding
Lilypetal Joined Wed 02/25/09 Posts: 4052	Mon 05/04/09 07:56 AM Edited by Lilypetal on Mon 05/04/09 07:57 AM
HIDING Only a vision, nothing but a toy An illusion without feeling Don't bother to look inside You won't find what I'm concealing I'm just a game to be played There is nothing more to me I have no heart that bleeds There is no soul full of misery When I cry, my tears evaporate Because I have an absent mind Don't try to look any deeper There is nothing more to find You can't reach out to me I will slip from your hands Stop trying to find me There is nothing to understand

Gossipmpm Joined Tue 03/03/09 Posts: 19414	Mon 05/04/09 07:58 AM
Wow Double wow!! Love it!! Tammy

2KidsMom Joined Tue 09/30/08 Posts: 58206	Mon 05/04/09 08:05 AM
Very Nice Write..

MirrorMirror Joined Fri 10/26/07 Posts: 89680	Mon 05/04/09 08:18 AM
HIDING Only a vision, nothing but a toy An illusion without feeling Don't bother to look inside You won't find what I'm concealing I'm just a game to be played There is nothing more to me I have no heart that bleeds There is no soul full of misery When I cry, my tears evaporate Because I have an absent mind Don't try to look any deeper There is nothing more to find You can't reach out to me I will slip from your hands Stop trying to find me There is nothing to understand

Lilypetal Joined Wed 02/25/09 Posts: 4052	Mon 05/04/09 08:30 AM
Wow Double wow!! Love it!! Tammy Thank you so much for your kind words, Tammy. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Lilypetal Joined Wed 02/25/09 Posts: 4052	Mon 05/04/09 08:30 AM
Very Nice Write.. Thank you so much.

Lilypetal Joined Wed 02/25/09 Posts: 4052	Mon 05/04/09 08:31 AM
Thanks Mirror.

DTHRomeo Joined Wed 06/20/07 Posts: 43387	Mon 05/04/09 08:44 AM
Lovely

pkd1220 Joined Thu 05/24/07 Posts: 8318	Mon 05/04/09 08:47 AM
Powerful and moving- great write

Lilypetal Joined Wed 02/25/09 Posts: 4052	Mon 05/04/09 08:48 AM
Lovely

Lilypetal Joined Wed 02/25/09 Posts: 4052	Mon 05/04/09 08:49 AM
Powerful and moving- great write Thank you PK!!

Sharris Joined Sun 12/10/06 Posts: 7300	Mon 05/04/09 08:51 AM
HIDING Only a vision, nothing but a toy An illusion without feeling Don't bother to look inside You won't find what I'm concealing I'm just a game to be played There is nothing more to me I have no heart that bleeds There is no soul full of misery When I cry, my tears evaporate Because I have an absent mind Don't try to look any deeper There is nothing more to find You can't reach out to me I will slip from your hands Stop trying to find me There is nothing to understand Peek a boo you with a view.. s

Lilypetal Joined Wed 02/25/09 Posts: 4052	Mon 05/04/09 12:24 PM
Peek a boo you with a view.. s Hee hee, that's cute. Thanks for reading my work, Sharris.

AngelLight Joined Sat 04/12/08 Posts: 4817	Mon 05/04/09 12:40 PM
HIDING Only a vision, nothing but a toy An illusion without feeling Don't bother to look inside You won't find what I'm concealing I'm just a game to be played There is nothing more to me I have no heart that bleeds There is no soul full of misery When I cry, my tears evaporate Because I have an absent mind Don't try to look any deeper There is nothing more to find You can't reach out to me I will slip from your hands Stop trying to find me There is nothing to understand Beyond moving, poignant

Lilypetal Joined Wed 02/25/09 Posts: 4052	Mon 05/04/09 03:15 PM
Thank you AngelLight!!

Lilypetal Joined Wed 02/25/09 Posts: 4052	Wed 05/06/09 07:54 AM
Thank you Le-Ann for the lovely email.

LAMom Joined Tue 12/12/06 Posts: 26866	Wed 05/06/09 10:36 AM
A beautiful and moving moment

sexymami7979 Joined Fri 11/16/07 Posts: 337	Wed 05/06/09 10:38 AM
SPECHLESS .... Simply amazing.....

Lilypetal Joined Wed 02/25/09 Posts: 4052	Wed 05/06/09 12:09 PM
Wow, thank you all so much!! I didn't think this poem was all that good when I wrote it. ((Everyone))