Okay so I updated my profile so what do you all think? Please be honest

Very Nice profile and Pictures, hope you enjoy your stay.

Well you said honest so I'll just say that you need not say "anything else, just ask" You already did that, which was a creative touch.


Sooo...very nice, me likey, especially the last part.

Cangel,

Well, you're showing your lacy underwear, bra, or whatever, so you're gonna get guys that wanna have sex with you. It's almost like a green light on the ol' control panel. Men get somewhat aroused when they see this kind of stuff.

I don't know what uploading a picture of a *flower* does for you. As a Web designer, I have to tell you. Less is more on the Internet, and the flower adds nothing. Men have to click a link to see more than six pictures.

I'd delete the last three pictures, unless they're your most recent ones. You look better in your other pictures.

Your first line seems a little negative, but hopefully you'll accomplish what you want with it.

Delete "Well" and "Basically". They help when you're getting your thoughts together, and they're good things to delete afterwards.

When I see, "looking for someone that can keep up with me," I don't consider the woman. For the most part, I don't compete with women. I had a girlfriend that saw things in this "keep up with me" way, and I've seen it done to an old roommate of mine. My take? You either like me the way I am now, or it's a nonstarter. On an online dating site, a "nonstarter" is a single click -- and poof, I'm looking at someone's profile that says, "I love you just the way you are." [Billy Joel]

I'm not going to freak out trying to be good enough for a woman that thinks she's 'all that,' whether she is or not. I might not want to run the same race. It's nice that you have a healthy ego, but...

Consider replacing "ya" with "you". (This is a personal choice.)

"Am I stubborn, heck yes!"
I really don't think this is helping you. Maybe it will ward off men that don't like women that are stubborn, and save you time (and maybe even a little heartache) -- or even *attract* a man that *likes* stubborn women.

You realize that "stubborn" has a negative connotation, don't you? Most men, I think, will be turned off by this. You can leave it in there as a filter, I suppose.

I wonder what kind of man contacts a "stubborn" woman.

> "Have I broken a man[']s heart before? Nope!"
Less is more. This adds little to nothing.
Men are reading this trying to get a feel for you, to decide if they want to ask you out.

To me, this doesn't really make much difference. Personally, I'm not such a wimp that I'm going to seek out a woman just because she's never broken anyone's heart before. I've had my heart broken before.

Mainly, I just think this doesn't say much.

"Have I gotten my heart broke[n] before? Yes, but who hasn't?"
Again, this doesn't add much. It doesn't tell us much about you.

You've gotten your heart broken, but who hasn't? So if it's so common, then it doesn't really distinguish you from many other women.

"Do I dwell on the past? Nope!"
Okay, now we know what you *don't* do. Less is more. This doesn't tell us much. Is there something you're trying to say here, because I'm not getting it.

"Am I fun-loving, wild, and sassy?"
This is good. It tells us about you -- although they're adjectives (fluff). Leave it in.

"Yes! Am I honest?"
This is huge. Leave this in.

"Heck yea[h] (will even tell ya if ya got a bad haircut)"
Very good. You're baldly honest. This tells us about you. People from where I grew up tend to be more blunt and baldly honest. I know where you're coming from. Besides, you're *supposed* to tell your partner if he's gotten a bad haircut. You're a stakeholder.

"Am I nice? Yes I am."
Good. Leave it in. Absolutely.

"Am I concided? Nope, I am just me."
Good.
Rather than using a negative, though, consider turning this around -- telling us what you *are*. "I am just me" is okay...

Overall, some of your prose could be condensed. Less is more, especially on the Internet.

You can change:
> Am I fun-loving, wild, and sassy? Yes! Am I honest? Heck yea (will even tell ya if ya got a bad haircut) Am I nice? Yes I am. Am I concided? Nope...<

Into:
I am fun-loving, wild, sassy, nice, and not conceited -- and I am so honest, I will even tell you if you've gotten a bad haircut!

"Anything else just ask." This adds nothing. Less is more. Delete it. We know we can ask.

> "then they leave once you no longer need them or you have learned what you needed to from them."<
Oh my gosh. This looks like a warning on a cigarette pack! <lol> This is so bad it's comical! It connotes "user", love 'em and leave 'em.

The next sentence is almost poetry. I really think you should rework the "they leave once you no longer need them" part. <lol>

I see some apparent contradictions in your profile:
(1) You have pictures of yourself in your lacy bra. You write, "I am not here for fwb's or a one night stand." You filter out men that are "seeking an intimate encounter."
Can't you get a picture of yourself in an evening gown, cocktail party dress, swimsuit, or something? I'm not saying don't 'flaunt it,' if that is what you want to do. Just do it in a classier way. You'll still achieve the same effect, without the downside.

(2) You wrote you're, "looking for someone that can keep up with [you]," but that you're not conceited. Do you think you're 'all that,' or don't you?

Good luck, Cangel.

Your profile needs work, but you've got a "Delete" key. You'll get there.

As it is, a lot of men won't read your profile, or will go into 'skim' mode.

Bob

wow...

Welcome
and have fun..