like joe budden, come and take a walk with me, let go of the past and look into the future bleed, like i let my pen bleed, i let my heart pour with this heavy distinct poetry, something so average that a unique soldier in the path to war would understand what im talking about.....

so take a walk with me, thrue these eyes i see, blazing hatred and fake @ss theory's, false philosophy, false prophecy, statements that occurred with hating peoples like you and me, such ideology, full blown capacity, never the less i walk alone with no one guiding me, i hate to see this path in some one elses eyes but mines, cause only God knows and can judge me on the decisions so divine....

come and take a walk with me, thrue these cold heart streets, thrue the painless yet pain full killing spree, where the hustlers hustle to keep the offspring's alive, where the dealers deal to live a life described, as the superstar fame with money females drugs and flames, destroy the lives of others just to prove that they aint lame, whats more distorted is the path that they come from, i see so many destruction in this world is like my life should be done, yet i hold my shoes tied so i dont trip up in this illusion, false statements in which peoples make it seem to me such a confusion, like if any one would care bout me, even my fams distorted my past, with out that my life wouldn't be abstract, so i ended that with a blast....

so come and take a walk with me, a short distance, in which we could talk about the things i been thrue and others see, the actions all that lead me to the disturbing he, and im talking about God cause i know what he sees in me, aint satisfying but its only a world of survival, i've seen alot of struggles and i think it might be revived too, cause the struggles get worse day by day, and night by morning peak, of the sun shining bright but death next to each and everyone of us....

i mean who could i trust, WHO COULD I TRUST!!! when my fams ended with me, when my pastor gave up on me and my girl said she aint for me, when i lost all hope, when i have no one to cope, when all you see is dropping me to the knees to feel doped, dumped on like a trash filled with sharp knifes, and im the defenseless one who is tied by the strive, i feel alive when im dead, and i feel dead when im alive, i feel lost when im found, and found when i lost, i feel hated when i love and i feel love when i hate, dont discriminate on my language or disregards of my race....

never again am i to break off this curve, and i deserve the treatment cause i took a wrong turn, feel all dishonored and lost like if im gold not chromed, so once i state with my mind free, i walk alone.....

Feeling it bro.

"so take a walk with me, thrue these eyes i see, blazing hatred and fake @ss theory's, false philosophy, false prophecy, statements that occurred with hating peoples like you and me, such ideology, full blown capacity, never the less i walk alone with no one guiding me, i hate to see this path in some one elses eyes but mines, cause only God knows and can judge me on the decisions so divine...."

This has a great structure, like domino's...
keep at it and keep knocking'em down.

good job

thanks, yeh most of my pieces are rap lyrics, all writings from past experiences and things i see would inspire me to write lyrics like this...