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      the day was august 3rd 1991,
 only problem i had was when the streetlights mocked the sun, the message came loud and clear, from the step where i laid down, thoughts if i could go back to the only problem back then now, for i never thought i would grow up to see, the day i turned a man and problems were too much for me, but every night i think back to the simple things in this world, never thought that the clam would ever give me a pearl, but it happened when i realized that i was in charge, you see life is to precious and dreams never too large. | |
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| the day was august 3rd 1991, only problem i had was when the streetlights mocked the sun, the message came loud and clear, from the step where i laid down, thoughts if i could go back to the only problem back then now, for i never thought i would grow up to see, the day i turned a man and problems were too much for me, but every night i think back to the simple things in this world, never thought that the clam would ever give me a pearl, but it happened when i realized that i was in charge, you see life is to precious and dreams never too large.  good job   | |
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      thank you for posting i love to write and i also love positive feedback!    | |
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      Great write         I loved the lines "only problem I had was when the streetlights mocked the sun" "you see life is too precious and dreams never too large" | |
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      your poem is beautiful please write more   | |
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      I liked this very much. I dont particularly care for the title, I think it's sort of presumptuous, but the body of the piece is excellent.
 My favorite lines: "for i never thought i would grow up to see, the day i turned a man and problems were too much for me" Really nice   | |
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      yea the more i think about it i dont like the title either...thanks for the compliments.    | |
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