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Poets, like it or not, get it or not? CaptCliff
Jiminy Cricket I found your Jiminy Cricket Bound and Gagged Hogtied to my weeping willow tree Covered in your spider web silk Wrapped up like a mummy Prince Some stealthy sleuths Some shadowy gang Cut his heart out With razor blades Garroted him with piano wire lies Finished him off with a single shot Of ice cold self deception I would rather have found a horse's head In my fluffy white down covered king size bed Such a noble conscience deserved A far more conscious And less bitter end |
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that is great 
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Nicely done.
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Edited by
LAMom
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Mon 11/17/08 09:44 AM
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Heya you,, Welcome to our home
Took ya awhile to get here,,, Most awesome read,,,  
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thanks u all....the Capt was so insecure about it he posted and ran like a scared rabbit..only to just return..and take a peek at yer comments. So I'm not dead? i just told some truth...weird.
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Edited by
ak0
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Tue 11/18/08 08:11 PM
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yes, we'd all like to welcome i am sure a new member to the creative forum, captain cliff, who i've had the pleasure already to know in writing, always a treat for the brainy brain..
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thanks u all....the Capt was so insecure about it he posted and ran like a scared rabbit..only to just return..and take a peek at yer comments. So I'm not dead? i just told some truth...weird.
Telling the truth is usually the best start in writing. And I believe I've made my thoughts on this particular piece of yours clear *smile* About time you jumped ship and joined us Captain. |
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oh yeah, one more thing...y'all know Chinese Emperor Qin's terra-cotta army....8000 beautifully detailed ceramic soldiers buried with him for his protection. If something happens to me...I want to be buried with 8000 clay figurines in the likeness of Katie, Denise, and Alicia. I mean it....
  
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oh yeah, one more thing...y'all know Chinese Emperor Qin's terra-cotta army....8000 beautifully detailed ceramic soldiers buried with him for his protection. If something happens to me...I want to be buried with 8000 clay figurines in the likeness of Katie, Denise, and Alicia. I mean it....
awesome  the power of three
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Edited by
MsWizard
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Tue 11/18/08 08:11 PM
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oh yeah, one more thing...y'all know Chinese Emperor Qin's terra-cotta army....8000 beautifully detailed ceramic soldiers buried with him for his protection. If something happens to me...I want to be buried with 8000 clay figurines in the likeness of Katie, Denise, and Alicia. I mean it....
Well, I've always had a real aversion to being buried. Would you care to share ashes with us instead? 
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Awesome! good job. welcome to this forum, rock on fellow poet. smiles
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Poets, like it or not, get it or not? CaptCliff Jiminy Cricket I found your Jiminy Cricket Bound and Gagged Hogtied to my weeping willow tree Covered in your spider web silk Wrapped up like a mummy Prince Some stealthy sleuths Some shadowy gang Cut his heart out With razor blades Garroted him with piano wire lies Finished him off with a single shot Of ice cold self deception I would rather have found a horse's head In my fluffy white down covered king size bed Such a noble conscience deserved A far more conscious And less bitter end I have a question, I hope it doesn't sound silly, but I was wondering, when you said, its dark but real, did you mean kinda like maybe other poets on here aren't real with their writings, and if not, what do you mean by that, or are you saying, it is Real as in a hard subject? 
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definitely the latter inkraven....i have come to know some of u and can only marvel at how real (truthful)the words/work is...in a world/society that appears to have become masters of superficiality...like reality tv. More personally, since u dont know me...I have only recently "crossed over" (nods to John Edwards) and left the safe confines of my therapy chair to attempt to tell MY truth versus nodding alot and saying, "I understand..oh it looks like our time is up..". Oh yeah, ask the other peeps...I'm sarcastic...but not mean. In fact, I bleed alot...and seek solace in a place with people of depth
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definitely the latter inkraven....i have come to know some of u and can only marvel at how real (truthful)the words/work is...in a world/society that appears to have become masters of superficiality...like reality tv. More personally, since u dont know me...I have only recently "crossed over" (nods to John Edwards) and left the safe confines of my therapy chair to attempt to tell MY truth versus nodding alot and saying, "I understand..oh it looks like our time is up..". Oh yeah, ask the other peeps...I'm sarcastic...but not mean. In fact, I bleed alot...and seek solace in a place with people of depth .
[/quote Now who says Only Women Bleed? |
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definitely the latter inkraven....i have come to know some of u and can only marvel at how real (truthful)the words/work is...in a world/society that appears to have become masters of superficiality...like reality tv. More personally, since u dont know me...I have only recently "crossed over" (nods to John Edwards) and left the safe confines of my therapy chair to attempt to tell MY truth versus nodding alot and saying, "I understand..oh it looks like our time is up..". Oh yeah, ask the other peeps...I'm sarcastic...but not mean. In fact, I bleed alot...and seek solace in a place with people of depth .
[/quote Now who says Only Women Bleed?
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Yeah, and I believe it was the band New Radicals who sang (about Alice Cooper, Courtney Love,and Marilyn Manson, etc.)
You're all fakes Run to your mansions Come around, we'll kick your ass in! Don't let go One dance left Don't give up Can't forget (you Get What You Give) |
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 st-utter, st-tammer, I believe I will think (hmmmmmm) 3 (sounds reasonable) times before I google for a response in one of your threads again.
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I like this Capt. Cliff
Great visuals...don't know where you crossed over from but welcome
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Muchas gracias pkd, and dkowench dont worry...anybody with wench in their name is supercool with CaptCliff! ....and..I just realized I want to change the phrase noble conscience with "exquisite corpse", which has several layers of meaning, all very appropriate. I am so afraid that the reader wont "understand" that I make dull compromises (in wording)that are either too obvious or just wrong...hey, I'm learning!!
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