One night I was sitting at my laptop and I started writing this. Please Don't think I would actually kill anyone but I was thinking of making it into some kind of horror book.

Tell me what you all think......

she stands her eyes roaming the dark waters of the ocean her dress and hair billow around her the dagger in her hand drips blood onto the ground, Turning she raises the dagger and licks the blade clean enjoying every moment of her kill her eyes stray to the body not 10 feet from her and she smiles. Her husband or ex husband now lay on the cold ground. She strides up to him rolling him over with the toe of her boot she bends down and places her fingers on his throat, no pulse good that means the lying bastard had finally suffered his fate and at his wives own hands. she smiled at the last thought " not like i would have let anyone else have the satisfaction of sinking a blade into you " she mumbled. No one had a grudge against him the way she did and to think just days before there perfect little marriage had been whole and beautiful. That thought brought tears to her eyes she reached her hand up and wiped they away quickly living a bloody smear on her cheek. She stood up casting one last look at her husband she mumbled " You said you'de love me forever you bastard " she gazed around the area making sure she didnt leave anything that would connect her to the murder, satisfied she kicked him one last time and set off running downhill toward her car her " getaway vehicle" she thought with a laugh as she climbed behind the wheel. She had never done anything like this before, She had been scared but who know killing the cheating bastard would feel so good. She started the car and when the radio blasted on she thumped the steering wheel to the beat she couldnt remember a time she felt this alive. She was on a high the whole drive home not until she had closed the front door of her house.. there house did it hit her like a sledge hammer and she sank to her knees in the hallway and wept into her hands. What had happend there marriage had been going so well, or so she thought until last night. Her husband had been spending a late night at work so she had decided to drop in with dinner for him how was she supposed to know his " late night " wasnt filing papers but having sex ontop of them the bastard, he had lied to her, pretended that he still loved her, slept in the same bed with her while he was seeing someone else on the side. How could he she wondered how could anyone pretend life everything was normal while they were runing someone elses lives. The plan to make him pay had come to her in the night, like a dream it had all played out before her.The perfect way to kill her husband.

I'd recommend breaking it up into smaller paragraphs -- large blocks of text are harder on the eyes and will cause some people to turn away.

The storyline itself looks good -- I myself do a lot of writing in present-tense narrative (I stole it from John Updike -- it has a sort of cinematic immediacy to it) and I think it's effective for the piece you've provided.

I would also recommend some added punctuation -- some of the sentences are a bit undirected, and it's not always clear where one ends and the next begins.

For example:

"she stands her eyes roaming the dark waters of the ocean her dress and hair billow around her the dagger in her hand drips blood onto the ground, Turning she raises the dagger and licks the blade clean enjoying every moment of her kill her eyes stray to the body not 10 feet from her and she smiles."

would be clearer as:

"She stands, her eyes roaming the dark waters of the ocean; her dress and hair billow around her. The dagger in her hand drips blood onto the ground. Turning, she raises the dagger and licks the blade clean, enjoying every moment of her kill. Her eyes stray to the body, not 10 feet from her, and she smiles."

Just a few minor changes but considerably clearer.

You should keep writing. You have talent.

Thank you I'll try and edit the save copy. And then I'll edit it here.

nice plan for a story

thank you =)