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Battered Paladin
You tell me now is not the time And it's not the perfect place. Tell me now my dear one Whose feet have set the pace? Patience is a virtue Yet waiting's such a crime, How long shall I be patient Till I've wasted too much time? I've seen the carnal spirits Devouring your heart, Leaving you in pain Long after they depart. Yet there I am again Still here to cheer your sad, Cleaning up a mess You really never thought you had. It's for you my heart is breaking It's you I wish to save But then again I wonder Why I'm such a mindless babe. I know you just can't see The promise I could give, Yet then again you're blinded By the way you choose to live. You know we're not so different, Sometimes we're both the same, We both don't stop to realize That we're the ones to blame. So in honor of my love And deepest cares so true, I take my leave of absence In deep respect for you. I can only mend a heart When one seeks to end the pain This time I guess I've lost And it's driven me insane. I'll always be your knight Garbed in battered steel, And guard you with my caring Till I no longer heal. Fadedspirit 10/30/2008 |
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Great write- I say save ourselves. If we don't we aren't fit for anyone else
 
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Battered Paladin You tell me now is not the time And it's not the perfect place. Tell me now my dear one Whose feet have set the pace? Patience is a virtue Yet waiting's such a crime, How long shall I be patient Till I've wasted too much time? I've seen the carnal spirits Devouring your heart, Leaving you in pain Long after they depart. Yet there I am again Still here to cheer your sad, Cleaning up a mess You really never thought you had. It's for you my heart is breaking It's you I wish to save But then again I wonder Why I'm such a mindless babe. I know you just can't see The promise I could give, Yet then again you're blinded By the way you choose to live. You know we're not so different, Sometimes we're both the same, We both don't stop to realize That we're the ones to blame. So in honor of my love And deepest cares so true, I take my leave of absence In deep respect for you. I can only mend a heart When one seeks to end the pain This time I guess I've lost And it's driven me insane. I'll always be your knight Garbed in battered steel, And guard you with my caring Till I no longer heal. Fadedspirit 10/30/2008 So in honor of my love And deepest cares so true, I take my leave of absence In deep respect for you. Your such a gentle Soul |
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Awww, thanks MisKim.
 Thank you very much pkd. Sometimes though, it's not about saving ourselves but having the knowledge of when to walk away and refresh ourselves. Sometimes that which we think may be lost is just misplaced. Well thank you (((LAMom))). The light you bring always speaks it's wisdom and care.
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I knew from the title this was gonna be a rip me up and hit too close. It did!
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Hmm...Someone hurry up and get me a thread and needle so I can put my friend back together.
Maybe ya need to talk? I'm always near. Thanks DKW. |
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human and heartfelt ... fantastic!
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Thanks ArtGurl.
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Been there, done that! Good news is time is still ticking and hope exists.
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Very true Mystique. Hope always exists.
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Great poem! I find it very difficult to write rhyming poems that are as lengthy as this one! One little annoyance though, your line, "You really never thought you had" strikes me as having too many syllables. (Sorry to be such a nitpicker - I hope you don't mind). The rest of the poem flowed perfectly though!
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Battered Paladin You tell me now is not the time And it's not the perfect place. Tell me now my dear one Whose feet have set the pace? Patience is a virtue Yet waiting's such a crime, How long shall I be patient Till I've wasted too much time? I've seen the carnal spirits Devouring your heart, Leaving you in pain Long after they depart. Yet there I am again Still here to cheer your sad, Cleaning up a mess You really never thought you had. It's for you my heart is breaking It's you I wish to save But then again I wonder Why I'm such a mindless babe. I know you just can't see The promise I could give, Yet then again you're blinded By the way you choose to live. You know we're not so different, Sometimes we're both the same, We both don't stop to realize That we're the ones to blame. So in honor of my love And deepest cares so true, I take my leave of absence In deep respect for you. I can only mend a heart When one seeks to end the pain This time I guess I've lost And it's driven me insane. I'll always be your knight Garbed in battered steel, And guard you with my caring Till I no longer heal. Fadedspirit 10/30/2008 You are a warm and loving soul. But you need to stop cleaning up other's messes. It does them no good and it's too hard on your soft heart. This is a softly sweet piece tinged with a raw bit of sadness ... 
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Always your best try, to save another from a cry.
Yet in the end, they just consider you a friend. Life and living is molded through forgiving. Yet all your time spent hoping and praying. Cannot stop nor change their thoughts of straying. To give is a blessing, to give to much, just hurts Nice write man. 
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Thanks for visiting Pathnine and thanks for the comment. I'm glad you liked this write. I don't think it's nit picky at all. You're right in noticing that line, I thought I had edited it out.
Thank you MsWizard. Your thoughts are taken to heart as your comments are felt in warmth. Very true there iam4u. Thanks for dropping by.
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